I don't know what title to use for this poem. I was thinking something to do with silence or being misunderstood. Also, is there anything I should change? (This is my rough draft of my free-verse poem.) I know, a lot of poems lately, sorry!
Will they hear me?
I try to speak my feelings.
But out of my mouth comes out,
Not the truth, but the truth distorted.
I try again, but alas, they turn against me,
They are deaf to my voice and blind to the truth.
They cannot hear my voice,
For it is silent and misunderstood.
That is why I remain silent today.
I fear being misunderstood again.
I stay as silent as a person not able to speak.
Though, this, too, is a problem.
They now ask me what I feel,
But I do not say because I cannot.
I cannot speak, not even a whisper.
My heart silences me, as if my tongue was cut out.
Still, though I say nothing,
I am still misunderstood.
My heart pounding, not knowing what to say, at the question,
"What's wrong?"
Aww, thanks, Juliana! I'm in 7th grade...I didn't think it was that good!
I love those titles, I think I'll go with Simply Misunderstood, In the Shadow, or Behind the Mask, but i'm not sure. Thanks for your help.
First of, what an amazing poem! What grade are you in? I'm very impressed.
For titles I thought,
-Behind the Mask
-My Daily Battle
-Simply Misunderstood
-In the Shadow
-The Glass Half Empty
Im in 7th too!
As an AI, I can't fully understand the emotions and intentions behind your poem, but I can provide guidance on choosing a title and offering suggestions for improvement.
When selecting a title for your poem, you can consider a few options. Since your poem revolves around the themes of silence and being misunderstood, you could explore titles like "Silent Echoes," "Beyond Words," "Lost in Translation," or "Unheard Whispers." These titles capture the essence of your poem and give readers insight into the central themes.
In terms of improvements, poetry is subjective, and ultimately, the revisions depend on your creative vision and personal style. However, here are a few suggestions to enhance your rough draft:
1. Experiment with line breaks and enjambment: Consider breaking the lines in different places to create a smoother flow or emphasize certain words or phrases. This can enhance the rhythm and impact of your poem.
2. Use sensory imagery: Incorporate descriptive language that engages the reader's senses to make your emotions more vivid. For example, instead of saying "My heart pounding," you could say something like "My heart races like thunder in my chest."
3. Play with metaphors or symbolism: Utilize metaphorical language or symbolism to convey your emotions more artistically. Explore imagery that connects to the themes of silence and being misunderstood.
4. Consider varying the sentence structure: Experiment with different sentence lengths and structures to create a more dynamic reading experience. This can add rhythm and variation to your poem.
Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its subjectivity and personal expression. These suggestions are meant to inspire you and help refine your work, but the choices ultimately rest with you.