hi all i was just wonrdering if someone read put of my paper and tell me how it sounds. thanks alot
amy
Manas National Park is a sanctuary and is on the World Heritage List. It is a place that has been through many changes and still faces many more. With it’s political instability and the threat of poaching. The park and its animals are facing some hard times. However, if the park and its country unite as a one, and make the necessary changes to improve the park and their political future, then there is nothing that can stand in its way.
Manas National Park was placed on the World Heritage list in 1992. It was placed on the site when the Bodo militants invaded the area to get political redress. When this happened the infrastructure was greatly damage, which leads to many of the park’s trees and animals to be killed and chopped down. After sometime the government of India and the state of Assam put into affect a rehabilitation plan. The plan was established in 1997. With this plan in place the security in and around the sanctuary has improved greatly. The WHC and the IUCN are trying to get Royal Manas National Park in Bhutan on the World heritage site as well. If this happens it would improve the protection of the ecosystem of the Manas Parks as a whole.
The life forms that are found in and around Manas National Park are very diverse with many different kinds of plants and animals. Some of the worlds most endanger animals call this park home. These animals include: Tigers, Elephants, Rhinos, Wild Buffaloes, Leopards, Clouded Leopards and one of the most endanger animal of all the Black Panther.
The parks is made up of three major vegetation that consist of semi-evergreen forest, mixed moist and dry deciduous forests, and several types of grassland. The grassland covers almost half of the park. The grassland future divides into two different types of grassland: semi-evergreen alluvial grassland and low alluvial savanna woodland.
The Animals and plants in the Manas National Park and across the world are dependent on each other. One without the other just would not work. The animals that eat plants also feed the animals that eat meat. Furthermore, when an animal dies it feeds the soil that feeds the plants. As we all know this is called the circle of life.
When humans intrude on the animals habit it cause deforestation. Deforestation happens when we cut down trees or other plant life, without replacing them. This makes it hard on all the animals and plants and that area.
Thank you for using the Jiskha Homework Help Forum. Your essay is very interesting! A few grammar corrections:
Sentence 3, it's = it is; change to its
change the . to , = poaching, the park (to avoid a partial sentence)
rather than "unite as a one" delete "a" = unite as one
Why is "their political future" plural? Everywhere else, it has been "its..."
"greatly damage" needs to be "greatly damaged" ... Working on the same sentence, leading to many of the park's trees being chopped down and to animals being killed. (or you might want to restate all that)
After "rehabilitation plan that was established in 1997." When you combine 2 simple sentences into a complex one, your essay seems more sophisticated.
the World Heritage site = isn't it all capitalized? (World Heritage)
Some of the world's = possessive
Why are Tigers, Elephants, etc. capitalized?
Either indent the first word of each new paragraph, or skip a line. Paragraph 2 = The parks IS = should be The parks are or The park is. Both subject and verb should match = singular or plural... three (plural) major vegetations? or three major vegetation areas that
I wouldn't capitalize "Animals" in "The animals and plants..."
Paragraph 3 = animal's habitat = possessive & not "habit" but "habitat"... it causes (correct verb)
Rather than animals and plants and that area, you might like "animals and plants in that area."
It would be best to make all the corrections you can and then repost so it's easier to read.
Sra
thank so much i will revise my paper thanks again
amy
Overall, the paper sounds informative and highlights the importance of Manas National Park and its conservation efforts. However, there are some areas where the paper could be improved for better readability and grammar. Here are some suggested edits:
Manas National Park is a sanctuary and is on the World Heritage List. It has undergone numerous changes and still faces many challenges, including political instability and the threat of poaching. The park and its animals are currently in a difficult situation. However, if the park and its country unite and implement the necessary changes to improve the park and their political future, there will be nothing that can hinder their progress.
Manas National Park was added to the World Heritage list in 1992 during a period of unrest when Bodo militants invaded the area seeking political redress. This invasion led to significant damage to the park's infrastructure, resulting in the loss of many trees and animals. In response, the Indian government and the state of Assam established a rehabilitation plan in 1997. This plan has greatly improved security within and around the sanctuary. Additionally, the World Heritage Committee (WHC) and the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN) are working towards including Royal Manas National Park in Bhutan on the World Heritage site list. If successful, this inclusion would enhance the protection of the entire ecosystem of the Manas Parks.
The biodiversity within and surrounding Manas National Park is incredibly diverse, with a wide variety of plants and animals. Some of the world's most endangered animals call this park home, including tigers, elephants, rhinos, wild buffaloes, leopards, clouded leopards, and the critically endangered black panther.
The park comprises three major types of vegetation: semi-evergreen forest, mixed moist and dry deciduous forests, and various types of grassland. The grassland covers nearly half of the park and can be further classified into semi-evergreen alluvial grassland and low alluvial savanna woodland.
The animals and plants in Manas National Park, as well as ecosystems worldwide, depend on each other. They are interconnected in a delicate balance, where animals that eat plants also provide food for meat-eating animals. Furthermore, when an animal dies, it nourishes the soil, which in turn supports plant growth. This intricate relationship is commonly known as the circle of life.
Human intrusion into animal habitats leads to deforestation. Deforestation occurs when trees and other vegetation are cut down without being replaced, causing detrimental effects on the local flora and fauna.
To improve the clarity and flow of the paper, I would recommend proofreading for grammar and sentence structure. Additionally, make sure to double-check the consistency of verb tenses and overall coherence of the ideas presented.
Remember, these are suggestions to improve the paper based on readability and grammar. It would be helpful to have someone proofread the paper out loud and provide feedback on its content and clarity.