I have to rewrite a letter to a local newspaper.
Original Text:
your application for the advertised position has been forwarded to our personnel office. As the selection process moves forward, we will be in touch. Thank you for your interest.
I have to rewrite this paragraph but it is expressed very simply. How else can i write this?
I think it's the second (middle) sentence that could be worded differently. And/or you could eliminate the part about forwarding the application to personnel. You could just say the application has been received.
oh ok thank you so much for helping
To rewrite the paragraph in a more elaborate manner, you can consider adding more details and expanding on the main points. Here's a possible alternative:
"We acknowledge the receipt of your application for the esteemed advertised position, and would like to inform you that it has been duly forwarded to our distinguished personnel office. We assure you that as the meticulous selection process progresses, we will maintain regular communication with you to provide updates. We sincerely appreciate the interest you have shown in our organization."
By using more expressive language and adding descriptive phrases, the rewritten paragraph conveys a sense of professionalism and importance.