I personally think this is a terrific journal.Good job.Think you can reply to mine.?
Plz help to revise this journal, thanks!
The English-121 is my first course that taken in college. Even though I have taken AP courses before, I still feel something differences when taking this real college level course.
As every first class in high school, the process of the first class here is almost the same: instructor distributes the syllabus and policy of this course, as well as explains the details to us. Before we introduce ourselves to classmates, my instructor, Ms. Arney introduces her to us first. I am glad that I have a newspaper writer as a teacher to teach me how to write, since I was a magazine editor in my high school, but never have the opportunity to be coached by a professional writer. I think a professional writer may have a different way from a regular teacher to teach English like those are in high school. I am eager for my classes in the future.
It is our turn to introduce us. After everyone is done, I found that there are different kinds of students are sitting in a classroom, which differs from high school. Some of them are from high school, some of them are college students, and some of them even already have full time jobs. I think these diverse groups can bring various opinions and ideas to the classroom because all of us have different experiences. Therefore, this special diversity will create a nice atmosphere in an English class.
I enjoy the first college class in HCC. I think the three months will make me have a further understanding in English writing.
I personally think this is not a terrific journal, but I will still reply yours question.
I really htink this is brilliant! Good luck.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the journal! I appreciate your positive feedback. Now, let's talk about revising the journal you shared.
1. Structure: The journal lacks a clear structure. It would be helpful to organize the content into paragraphs to make it easier to read and follow the flow of ideas.
2. Introduction: Begin with a strong and engaging introduction that captures the reader's attention and introduces the main topic of the journal. You can mention the course title, English-121, and indicate your expectations or initial impressions.
3. Body: Develop the main ideas in separate paragraphs. Mention the similarities and differences you noticed between this college-level course and your previous experiences in AP courses. Provide specific examples or instances that highlight these differences. You can also discuss your enthusiasm for learning from a professional writer, the diverse range of students in the class, and how this diversity can contribute to an enriching learning environment.
4. Conclusion: Conclude the journal with a summary of your overall thoughts and expectations for the course. You can briefly explain how you anticipate these three months will enhance your understanding of English writing.
5. Grammar and Style: Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure to ensure clarity and coherence. It's also important to maintain a consistent style throughout the journal.
After revising these aspects, make sure to proofread the journal for any errors and make necessary adjustments.