I need to turn this into a really good thesis statement . In the myth " When Grizzlies walked Upright" explain how the bears lived in relation to each other before and after the introduction of the female into their clan, and explain how both the bears and female contributed to their community.

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I need to turn this into a really good thesis statement . In the myth " When Grizzlies walked Upright" explain how the bears lived in relation to each other before and after the introduction of the female into their clan, and explain how both the bears and female contributed to their community.

So is this good: The bears lived in relation to each other before and after the arrival of the female into their clain, and both the bears and female contributed to their community through.....

Answer 1

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Answer 2

To create a strong thesis statement, you can improve the provided suggestion by making it clear and specific. Based on the information given, you can revise the thesis statement as follows:

"In the myth 'When Grizzlies Walked Upright,' the introduction of a female into their clan affected the bears' relationships with each other, and both the bears and the female played significant roles in contributing to their community's growth and prosperity."

This revised statement clearly states the focus of your analysis, precisely mentioning the impact of the female on the bears' relationships and emphasizing the contributions of both the bears and the female to their community.