Literature Essay (Writeacher)
posted by Victoria .
Writeacher, I truly need your help. I must finish this essay tonight but I am struggling. I read my thesis statement along with the first body paragraph, but it doesn't correspond whatsoever! I think I may need to rewrite the entire first paragraph. I don't know what to do.
Could you possibly read my thesis statement and first body paragraph in my previous "Literature Essay (Writeacher)" post, and help me edit it so that they correspond with each other?
Here's your thesis statement from Writeacher's post last night.
"THIS is your thesis statement: People fear more now because there is more to be afraid of. "
Refer to the outline I suggested in your first thread on this subject. What is your first point?
My first point is that the fears of the past have become more severe in this present time.
This just restates your thesis statement. What specifically do we fear more now than we did in the past?
I disagree with your thesis. If I were to write an essay on this topic, my thesis statement would be
People have less to fear now than they have in the last 100 years.
I. Many illnesses that used to kill or cripple people have been eradicated
II. Fear of being bombed by nuclear weapons was a constant concern.
III. The U.S. drafted young men into the armed forces to fight in World War II, Korea, and Vietnam.
We fear shootings, bullying, being abducted, the loss of our jobs, walking alone at night, and the economy.
IV. African Americans faced segregated schools, discrimination, harassment, and lynching.
My assigned essay is to be about ways people today are more fearful than people in past generations, though.
O.K. There you have an outline for your essay. Now write a paragraph about each of these. You may want to combine some of these so that you have three substantial body paragraphs.