posted by queen .
help me write a paragraph, using several sentences, to describe a recent interaction with a friend or family member about personal finance or credit cards. This interaction may be imagined or real. Use at least five different pronouns in your sentences. Identify all pronoun in bold. do I have the five different pronouns? are well identifiend? are there any errors that need to be corrected? please help me.
Doreen, the issue about credit card debt is huge. it sound if you are speaking for me, trust me you are not alone, over the years I have had a very outstanding credit which gave me the opportunity to get what I want whenever and where ever without paying cash. But my situation is a bit different from yours, I try to help family and friends by getting stuff like rent, phone, car, cable etc in my name hoping this individuals will be grateful and honor their payment to keep my name and credit same way it before them but I guess I was just being a fool to them. I have seen correction activities on my credit for things I did not enjoy, now my credit is a mess. For the person with car, I already took the from her with back up payment plus insurance, this is so painful that I had sleepless night seeing my credit in that shape. Now the creditor don't about the story behind this non-payment, they need their money from me. Guess what, I have to cut back on a lot of things like my cable, my gym membership, no more prety nails or eyelashes and depriving my children certain things for christmas so that most of this debt will be paid off. Now I wish I can get a second job but with school I know I can't, so I try to go in for overtime if there is any hopefully I will get this mess taken care off and be wise with my credit hence forth. You might have to do the same thing am doing to get thing streghteneng up.
Pronouns include such words as I, he, she, it, me, you, they, us, my, yours, their, this, that, and we. Have you included 5 of these?
You have so many errors, I don't have time to mention them specifically.
You need to proofread you paragraph more closely. If nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Another option, if it is available on your computer, is to have the computer read it to you.
Also, make use of "Spelling and Grammar" under "Tools" in your word processing program.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.