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I'm writing an essay on the topic " Contributing to the community" and I was wondering what you guy think if I start my first sentence like this.

Everyone in their life had made some world-shattering contributions to the community.These significant additions help us determine our world and destiny.

-If there anything you think I should add/change, please do tell me. Thanks

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    Faulty pronoun. Everyone is singular. Their is plural and needs a plural antecedent.

    I don't think contributing to a community is world-shaking.

    "determine our world and destiny" is too vague.

    Please try again.

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