posted by Sara .
Dulce Et Decorum Est
Bent double, like old beggars under sacks,
Knock-kneed, coughing like hags, we cursed through sludge,
Till on the haunting flares we turned our backs
And towards our distant rest began to trudge.
Men marched asleep. Many had lost their boots
But limped on, blood-shod. All went lame; all blind;
Drunk with fatigue; deaf even to the hoots
Of disappointed shells that dropped behind.
GAS! Gas! Quick, boys!-- An ecstasy of fumbling,
Fitting the clumsy helmets just in time;
But someone still was yelling out and stumbling
And floundering like a man in fire or lime.--
Dim, through the misty panes and thick green light
As under a green sea, I saw him drowning.
In all my dreams, before my helpless sight,
He plunges at me, guttering, choking, drowning.
If in some smothering dreams you too could pace
Behind the wagon that we flung him in,
And watch the white eyes writhing in his face,
His hanging face, like a devil's sick of sin;
If you could hear, at every jolt, the blood
Come gargling from the froth-corrupted lungs,
Obscene as cancer, bitter as the cud
Of vile, incurable sores on innocent tongues,--
My friend, you would not tell with such high zest
To children ardent for some desperate glory,
The old Lie: Dulce et decorum est
Pro patria mori.
I have to explain this poem using SIFTT.
S = Sense(What the poem is about?)
I-Intention(Why the poem was written)
F-Feelings(what emotions are expressed or implied)
T-title-can help crack the puzzle of the poem
T-Techniques-rhyme, alliteration, simile, etc.
I have to explain this poem in a paragraph form using Siftt. I also have to tag it. T-Title, A-Author, G-Genre
Here it is:
In the poem "Dulce et Decorum Est", by Wilfred Owen, we see that he describes about the first world war. He talks about the scenario of the past. He portrays the people who were part of this war. He creates very powerful visuals in our minds. I think that the poem was written as a time capsule into the past for the new generations. I believe it was written for everyone to think and know about all the troubles the people went through during this war. Any reader would be able to sink deep in this poem, if they really put their mind to it. Each stanza reflects its own image for the reader to see. There are many emotions expressed in this poem. Some of them are anger, distress, fright, misery, etc. They all combine together as misfortune. You can tell by the fact that he's added every tiny detail about the daunting atmosphere around him. Those tiny details give quoted examples of him being surrounded with gloomy emotions. Obviously, he wouldn't be ahhpy to see all this. He must have felt really terrible. I can try to fit myself in his shoes, and sense the awkward situation. The title seems to reflect on something good--nice; At the end we get to know what the author actually says. He tells us that it is not a wonderful experience to fight for your country die at the end. He says that War is not worth it. He clarifies in his poem that individuals will cheer you to fight for your country, but, in truth, fighting for your country is basically punishing yourself to death, which is pointless. From my opinion, undergoing death is horrific. Life is a gift sent to each individual, and it’s a shame to see it all go to waste by simply starting mini fights, which end up to be big wars. The writer proves the saying: It is sweet and right to die for your country” wrong. It is not sweet to die for your country. He proves that saying as a lie. All anyone can leave behind by dying are, their memories; which makes each individual connected to that person shed tears. Some techniques in this poem are, similies, alliterations, imagery, stress, stanzas, rhymes and there is a periodic ending in this poem. An example of a simile in this poem is: Bent double, like old beggars under sacks. He describes the people as beggars. An example of an alliteration in this poem is: Men marched asleep. As I said before there is imagery in this poem; you can visualise what the author says. When I say there is stress in here, I mean that some parts in the poem are expressed with greater emphasis than others. Some are slowly and emotionally expressed while others are kind of expressed in anger, etc. Overall this whole poem tells every reader to look forward to their future, and make good choices which'll lead to fortune one day. Fighting for needs won't do the trick. The main objective is to take things slowly and calmly, no matter how much force is put on you. One can only put itself in trouble if it creates enemies, and enemies are created by fights. If all these fights can be solved than earth wouldn't be called "planet", it would be called "Heaven".
Please tell me if this is good. If I have made any spelling errors, or any punctuation errors, than please point that out for me. Any other opinions on this would be greatly appreciated, thanks:-)
....then slowly earth could be known as heaven
is the ending I have good? Or could I change it to what I have listed above? Any other suggestions would be appreciated.
First of all, I hope this isn't supposed to be all one paragraph. If it is, then fix it. If you intended separated paragraphs, you'll need to hit the Enter key twice after each paragraph to get them to show up separately on this website.
The first three sentences are repetitive and wordy. Rephrase those three into only one sentence, getting rid of repetitions of identical ideas. Then go through the rest of the paper and find other places like this.
Once you have done those things, I'll come back and check again.