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Can you please check the grammar in these two separate points. Thank you.

Irene shares with Clare how her daughter would be affected if John found out about his own wifes “true race” and reveals to Clare would could happen.

The lesson that Larson is trying to teach to her readers is that if they do not agree with the way people identify their race, let things be because racial tension will occur and the ending results may not be good for either person.

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    wife's

    teach her readers (omit "to")

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    Irene shares with Clare how her daughter would be affected if John found out about his own wifes “true race” and reveals to Clare would could happen.
    wife's <~~it's possessive

    Why is "true race" in quotation marks? Whom are you quoting? Why is there no citation? (And if you're not quoting anyone, get rid of the quotation marks.)

    The sentence is quite long; it would be better to divide it into two sentences.


    The lesson that Larson is trying to teach to her readers is that if they do not agree with the way people identify their race, let things be because racial tension will occur and the ending results may not be good for either person.
    comma after "if"

    "they should" before "let things"

    delete "ending" -- it's redundant

    This is also a long sentence and should be divided.

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