posted by mysterychicken .
Is this thesis OK for my schizophrenia essay?
Schizophrenia is a severe mental illness that deeply affects the patient's daily life
That's a factual statement, not a thesis statement. You should not delete anything; all you need to do is add your own position or stance or opinion and maybe do a little rephrasing.
Here are examples of thesis statements to help you:
I read the first one which tells the difference between a factual and thesis statement but I'm having a little writers block :P
Any suggestions on how I can rephrase this or what I need to add? I don't have an opinion on this topic...
If you don't have an opinion, what are you going to write? Just a report?
If you're supposed to be writing an essay (or research paper), you need to have a topic about which you have an opinion; otherwise, you cannot take and defend your position.
If you're still stuck about the topic, try this:
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Steps 1 and 2 seem to be what you need help with now.
this is to much to read u suck but thanks for wasting my time
You don't defend your position in a ressearch paper. You simply explain what you learned...the facts, no opinions.