I had to write a cover letter for my final project for the year, which had to include feedback and various other things I pretty much covered in my letter. Can someone proofread it and tell me if I need to improve anything in it please? Thanks SO much!!!
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Dear *name blocked for confidentiality*,
I completed a few assignments in a few of my Romeo & Juliet notebooks that needed to be done. One of them was my Act I notebook, which I originally got a 90/100 on it. This was mainly because I turned it in late, and I did not include class/movie notes that the class took on April 21. I fixed this by copying the notes from a classmate and included this in my final notebook. In my Acts II & III notebooks I put in everything I was supposed to, so therefore I got an 80/80 on it. My final notebook, however, I got a 45/50 on it because I did not include TM Notes on the reading, which was assigned on May 12. I completed and included this in my final notebook as well.
I learned many things from the Romeo & Juliet unit, but I will limit them down to five. One thing I didn’t exactly learn from this unit, but emphasized what I learned a long time ago was to not procrastinate. I will be honest with you; I was often up the night before the notebooks were due doing the work because I was being lazy the days I should have done the work. If I didn’t, I possibly would have gotten a perfect score for all of the notebooks, instead of just one that I did not procrastinate on. The second thing I learned was that sometimes life just doesn’t turn out the way you want it to. In the play, as Romeo fell in love with Juliet and no matter how hard he tried to be with her, it was just simply impossible. He ended up over his grief of his “dead” Juliet. A third thing I learned was that this play was well-written and told a wonderful, but tragic story of two “star-cross’d” lovers that can apply to many lives in this modern world today. A fourth thing I learned was that you must think your actions through before you commit them. Many times in the play someone was murdered somehow because the murderer did not think about alternative actions. A fifth thing I learned was that one must move on after someone’s death; it is unhealthy to dwell upon it. For instance, Romeo had killed himself after believing Juliet was dead, where if he had waited a little longer he would have discovered she was not dead after all.
I would like to provide some feedback for the class also. I liked how you ran our class; you taught important concepts well. The only thing I was not all that pleased about was our final project. It wasn’t that it was not that much fun to do; it was because a part of it was especially difficult to do. What I mean is that for most of the year, when it comes to analyzing stories or plays, you sort of “spoon-fed” us, as in you did the analyzing for us. When it came time for us to do our own analyzing for the book for our final, it was very stressful and difficult to do because we were so used to having someone who had experience in studying literature do it for us. I might sound helpless here, but I sort of got out of habit of putting effort into my work at the end of the year. All in all, this was a great year in your Honors English class, and I learned a lot. Thank you!
Sincerely,
*named blocked for confidentiality*
I completed a few assignments in a few of my Romeo & Juliet notebooks that needed to be done. One of them was my Act I notebook, which I originally got a 90/100 on it. This was mainly because I turned it in late, and I did not include class/movie notes that the class took on April 21. I fixed this by copying the notes from a classmate and included this in my final notebook. In my Acts II & III notebooks (COMMA) I put in everything I was supposed to, so therefore I got an 80/80 on it. My final notebook, however, I got a 45/50 on it because I did not include TM Notes on the reading, which was assigned on May 12. I completed and included this in my final notebook as well.
I learned many things from the Romeo & Juliet unit, but I will limit them down (CAN DELETE "DOWN" TO BE MORE CONCISE.) to five. One thing I didn’t exactly learn from this unit, but emphasized what I learned a long time ago (COMMA) was to not (PRECEDE "TO" WITH "NOT" SO YOU DON'T SPLIT AN INFINITIVE.) procrastinate. I will be honest with you; I was often up the night before the notebooks were due doing the work (COMMA) because I was being lazy the days I should have done the work. If I didn’t (WHAT? PROCRASTINATE OR STAY UP ALL NIGHT?), I possibly would have gotten a perfect score for all of the notebooks, instead of just one that I did not procrastinate on (TRY NOT TO END SENTENCE WITH A PREPOSITION, WHICH IS USED TO RELATE TO AN OBJECT.).
A NEW PARAGRAPH IS USED TO INDICATE A CHANGE IN IDEAS, PLACES, PERSONS OR TIMES.
The second thing I learned was that sometimes life just doesn’t turn out the way you want it to (DELETE "IT TO."). In the play, as Romeo fell in love with Juliet and no matter how hard he tried to be with her, it was just simply impossible. He ended up over his grief of his “dead” Juliet. (UNCLEAR WHETHER THE UNWANTED OUTCOME WAS THE INABILITY TO BE WITH JULIET OR THE SUICIDE — OR BOTH.)
A third thing I learned was that this play was well-written and told a wonderful, but tragic (COMMA)story of two “star-cross’d” lovers that can apply to many lives in this modern world today. (DO YOU KNOW OF A CURRENT EXAMPLE?)
A fourth thing I learned was that you must think your actions through before you commit them. Many times in the play (COMMA) someone was murdered somehow (DELETE "SOMEHOW" TO BE MORE CONCISE.) because the murderer did not think about alternative actions. (EXAMPLE?)
A fifth thing I learned was that one must move on after someone’s death; it is unhealthy to dwell upon it. For instance, Romeo had killed himself after believing Juliet was dead, where (NEW SENTENCE.) if he had waited a little longer (COMMA) he would have discovered she was not dead after all. (GOOD EXAMPLE. HOWEVER, ROMEO WAS NOT MERELY DWELLING ON THE DEATH.)
I would like to provide some feedback for the class also. I liked how you ran our class; you taught important concepts well. The only thing I was not all that pleased about was our final project. It wasn’t that it was not that much fun to do; it was because a part of it was especially difficult to do. What I mean is that for most of the year, when it comes to analyzing stories or plays, you sort of “spoon-fed” us, as in (DELETE "AS IN".) you did the analyzing for us. When it came time for us to do our own analyzing for the book for our final, it was very stressful and difficult to do (COMMA) because we were so used to having someone who had experience in studying literature do it for us. I might sound helpless here, but I sort of got out of habit of putting effort into my work at the end of the year. (DO YOU HAVE A SUGGESTION THAT MIGHT IMPROVE THE SITUATION?)
All in all, this was a great year in your Honors English class, and I learned a lot. Thank you!
For the titles of the plays, you need to underline or italicize them. (To do this online , you might need to precede the title with brackets <> containing either a U or I and follow the title with a second pair of brackets containing a slash (/) followed by the same letter. The bracketed instructions will not appear on the article.)
Skip lines or indent between paragraphs.
It might help to review your comma rules.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_comma.html
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems. Of course, you will find this hard to do, if you procrastinate.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
I hope this helps. Thanks for asking.
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Sure, I can proofread your cover letter and provide some feedback. Here are some tips for proofreading your letter:
1. Read it aloud: Reading your letter aloud can help you identify any grammatical errors or awkward sentence structures. Pay attention to clarity and flow.
2. Check for spelling and punctuation: Carefully review your letter for any spelling mistakes or punctuation errors. These can make your letter appear unprofessional.
3. Look for consistency: Make sure you are consistent with capitalization, formatting, and punctuation throughout the letter.
4. Clarify your feedback: When providing feedback on the class, make sure to be specific and clear. Avoid vague or general statements.
5. Structure and organization: Ensure that your letter has a clear structure and is well-organized. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas or sections of the letter.
Now, here is some feedback on your cover letter:
Dear [Name],
I completed a few assignments in my Romeo & Juliet notebooks, including my Act I notebook which I initially received a score of 90/100 on. However, this grade was lower mainly because I submitted it late and did not include the class/movie notes taken on April 21. To rectify this, I copied the notes from a classmate and included them in my final notebook. For my Acts II & III notebooks, I included all the required content and received a score of 80/80. Unfortunately, my final notebook received a score of 45/50 because I failed to include TM Notes on the assigned reading from May 12. I have since completed and included these notes in my final notebook.
Throughout the Romeo & Juliet unit, I learned several valuable lessons. First and foremost, I learned the importance of not procrastinating. Admittedly, I often found myself doing the work the night before the notebooks were due due to my own laziness. If I had managed my time better, I would have attained perfect scores for all the notebooks. Secondly, I learned that life doesn't always turn out the way we want it to, as exemplified by Romeo's ill-fated love for Juliet. Despite his best efforts, they were unable to be together, and he ultimately took his own life out of despair. Additionally, I gained an appreciation for the well-written and tragic story of these two "star-crossed" lovers which resonates with modern lives. Another lesson I learned was the importance of thinking through actions before committing them, as seen through the consequences of impulsive actions in the play. Lastly, I recognized the need to move on after the death of someone, as dwelling on it is unhealthy. For instance, Romeo's hasty decision to take his own life upon mistakenly believing Juliet to be dead could have been avoided if he had waited a little longer.
I would also like to provide some feedback on the class. Overall, I appreciated how you ran the class and effectively taught important concepts. However, I have some concerns regarding the final project. While it wasn't necessarily unenjoyable, there was a part of it that proved to be particularly challenging. Throughout the year, we were accustomed to your guidance and analysis when it came to studying literature. As a result, it was stressful and difficult for us to independently analyze the book for our final project. I acknowledge that I may have become reliant on having someone with expertise in literary analysis guide me, which made it challenging to put in the necessary effort. Despite this, I thoroughly enjoyed the year in your Honors English class and have learned a great deal. Thank you!
Sincerely,
[Your Name]
I hope this feedback helps you improve your cover letter!