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On this hwk help forum, do you edit people's work? I have a paragraph and I need someone to look it over and make some corrections. Would anyone be willing to do that?

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    Yes. We'll be glad to edit your paragraph.

    Please type it and post it here.

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    Could you image your son or daughter leaving you to fight in an international war as young as fifteen? Many parents would say that they would never let such a terrible thing happen. What if you didn’t have a say in this matter? What if your child was forced to partake in the war, what would you do then? Conscription, enforced military wartime, was one of the many struggles during the war. But don’t be mistaken, some volunteered to participate in the war. Many considered it a passage to manhood and a great honor to serve for their nation. When WW1 started in 1914, it was estimated to last one summer, and then everyone would return home. Unfortunately, that estimate was way off, and the war lasted for an awful 4 years (1914-1918).
    World War One was considered one of the bloodiest wars ever taken place in history. A kind of war that everyone swore to never start again. A war so horrifying that it was called, “The War To End All Wars.” People wonder, what kind of crisis could start a war so great? A war so atrocious that it would result in over 19 million deaths.
    Today, we pay a tribute to those soldiers who were killed in the line of duty during WW1. It takes true courage and outstanding bravery to jeopardize your own life in order to serve your country.
    “There's no honorable way to kill, no gentle way to destroy. There is nothing good in war. Except its ending.”

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    I'm editing your paragraph now. It should be posted in about 20 minutes.

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    thanks a lot

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    This is a good essay. :-)

    Could you imagine your son or daughter leaving you to fight in an international war as young as fifteen? Many parents would say that they would never let such a terrible thing happen. What if you didn’t have a say in this matter? What if your child was forced to partake in the war, what would you do then? Conscription, enforced military wartime, was one of the many struggles during the war. But don’t be mistaken; some volunteered to participate in the war. Many considered it a passage to manhood and a great honor to serve their nation. (Omit "for"

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    When World War I started in 1914, it was estimated to last one summer, and then everyone would return home. Unfortunately, that estimate was way off, and the war lasted for an awful four years (1914-1918). This war was considered one of the bloodiest wars omit "ever taken place" in history. It was the kind of war that everyone swore to never start again. It was so horrifying that it was called, “The War To End All Wars.” People wonder, what kind of crisis could start a war so great: a war so atrocious that it would result in over 19 million deaths.

    Today, we pay a tribute to those soldiers who were killed in the line of duty during WW1. It takes true courage and outstanding bravery to jeopardize your own life in order to serve your country.

    “There's no honorable way to kill, no gentle way to destroy. There is nothing good in war. Except its ending.” The quotation author's name goes here.

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    Thanks a lot. I have once question. What is the meaning of the bolded words?

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    The bolded words are the words that I changed.

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    thanks so much

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