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As I was looking at the map on the screen and realized my destination of my new home was REACHING closer, the flight attendant’s announcement CAME on, “Ladies and gentlemen, we ask that you remain seated and fasten your seatbelt. We will be landing shortly at the San Francisco Airport.”


would i say reaching closer or coming closer. also, instead of saying came on, what would be another way to say it.

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    Thank you for using the Jiskha Homework Help Forum. Definitely "coming closer." How about "the flight attendant announced...?"

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    October 22, 2007

    Ms. Amanda M. Willis
    53 Pendell Rd
    Poughkeepsie, NY 12601

    Dear Ms. Willis:

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    Our 17-year history provides the local service, and national strength necessary to offer the best employee-leasing programs available. We save business owners time and money, employee hassles, and employer liability.

    Your employees will receive health-care benefits, retirement-plan choices and a national credit union. Our program does not involve a lot of paperwork.

    Whether you have 1 or 1,000 employees, and offer no benefits to your employees. a full benefits package employee leasing will get you back to the basics of running your business more profitably. I will call you to arrange a time to meet with you and discuss your specific needs.

    Sincerely,
    PLEASE HELP ME

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