Incorporating Feedback Portfolio
A professional author usually asks several people to read and evaluate a manuscript before it is ready for publication. Each reader offers the author feedback, designed to improve the work. Readers may be friends or family members. They may be literary agents or editors at a publishing house. The process of reading, evaluating, and revising helps improve the communication between writer and reader. Ultimately, it produces a work that matches the original purpose and audience.Check-In
Think about each writing situation described and then answer the question it presents on a sheet of paper.
Question 1Upload your Writing a Narrative Portfolio. Remember to include the following items:
The final draft of your original narrative essay
To help you do your best, use the rubric to see how you will be graded.
Narrative Portfolio Rubric
Eighth-grader Renata wrote a mystery story for a young audience. After Renata’s younger sister read the story, she said it was scary and confusing. What changes could Renata make to improve her story for that young audience?
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Question 2
Eighth-grader Jamar wrote a realistic story for readers his age and intended for his story to teach a lesson about forgiveness. Jamar’s friend gave him this feedback: “I’m not sure why your characters were friends at the end. Maybe you should have them talk more.” How could Jamar revise his story to improve it for his readers?
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A narrative usually has a primary purpose, of entertaining the reader. In addition, a narrative may teach a lesson. Narratives such as historical fiction inform as well as entertain and instruct. Whatever your purpose might be, if your reader is not entertained, instructed, or informed, you have not done the job you set out to do.
For your narrative to succeed in its purpose, you must communicate clearly with your audience, the reader. This means you should create interesting characters, describe your setting in detail, and develop a logical plot.
As you read over your finished draft, ask yourself how well it suits your purpose and audience. Ask for feedback if you wish. You may need to make some final revisions to ensure your narrative succeeds in its purpose. Here are some questions to consider.
Purpose
Does my narrative fulfill my purpose? Will it entertain my reader?
Are my characters interesting? Is my plot comprehensible and logical?
If my story teaches a lesson, is that lesson clear?
Audience
What kind of stories does my audience prefer? Will my audience enjoy the narrative I wrote?
Can my audience “see” what I am describing? Did I use language that appeals to the senses and paints a mental picture for my readers? Are my verbs powerful and meaningful?
Will my audience be able to relate to the characters in my story and imagine themselves in the situation I have presented?
The rubric here will help you to assess your writing. Read it carefully to see how well you have followed the rules for writing a narrative.
Narrative Portfolio Rubric
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Practice
Review your draft and compare it to the bulleted list. Make sure your purpose for writing is evident. Look for places where you might make adjustments to communicate more clearly with your audience.
Then, read your draft against the rubric for narrative writing and decide whether you have met the requirements for strong narrative writing. Discuss your assessment with your Learning Coach and ask for feedback.
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View Learning Coach GuideReflect on the Portfolio
Read over your finished writing product and think about these questions. Write your reflections in your journal.
Think about the story map you created at the beginning of the Portfolio. How did thinking about your audience and purpose help to direct your writing?
How does your final draft compare to your first draft? What words did you change? What elements of your narrative—characters, setting, problem, theme—did you change? How did the changes you made improve your narrative?
The author Stephen King once said, “If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot.” How does the reading you do affect your ability to write well? How does the writing you do improve as you keep at it? Explain how reading and writing have affected your own writing.
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250 words and simple vocab
In the vast and dry Southwest, our family ranch is a special place we call home. Every morning, my family and I wake up early to tend to our cattle and horses. The sun beats down on the rugged land as we ride our horses, checking on our animals and making sure they have enough water and food.
Our ranch is surrounded by tall cacti and dusty trails that lead to wide open spaces. Our days are long and hard, but we love the peace and quiet of the desert. We often sit by the campfire at night, listening to the howls of coyotes in the distance.
Despite the challenges of ranching in the harsh Southwest, my family and I are dedicated to our animals and land. We know that the work is tough, but we wouldn't trade it for anything. The sound of hooves on the dusty ground and the sight of the sun setting over the rugged landscape make our hearts full.
Ranching in the Southwest is not easy, but for the Haught family, it is a way of life that we cherish every day.
Renata received feedback from her younger sister that her mystery story was scary and confusing for a young audience. To improve her story, Renata could consider making the plot less frightening and more clear. She could simplify the language and tone to make it more appropriate for a young audience. Renata could also add more explanations and details to help readers understand the story better.
Jamar's friend suggested that his realistic story about forgiveness could be improved by having the characters talk more at the end. Jamar could revise his story by adding dialogue between the characters to show their feelings and thoughts more clearly. This would help to develop the characters and their relationships, making the story more engaging and relatable for readers his age.
Overall, it is important for writers to consider their purpose and audience when crafting a narrative. By seeking feedback, making revisions, and considering how to best communicate with readers, writers can create a compelling and effective story. By reflecting on their own writing process and seeking to improve with each draft, writers can continue to grow and develop their skills.
ok create a narrative abt ranching in the southwest in simple and 250 words
In the vast and dry Southwest, there is a ranch owned by a kind man named Mr. Johnson. Every morning, Mr. Johnson wakes up early to tend to his cattle and horses. The sun beats down on the rugged land as Mr. Johnson rides his horse, checking on the animals and making sure they have enough water and food.
The ranch is surrounded by tall cacti and dusty trails that lead to wide open spaces. Mr. Johnson's days are long and hard, but he loves the peace and quiet of the desert. He often sits by the campfire at night, listening to the howls of coyotes in the distance.
Despite the challenges of ranching in the harsh Southwest, Mr. Johnson is dedicated to his animals and land. He knows that the work is tough, but he wouldn't trade it for anything. The sound of hooves on the dusty ground and the sight of the sun setting over the rugged landscape make his heart full.
Ranching in the Southwest is not easy, but for Mr. Johnson, it is a way of life that he cherishes every day.
ok that's great but replace Mr jonson with the Haught family
In the vast and dry Southwest, there is a ranch owned by the Haught family. Every morning, the Haught family wakes up early to tend to their cattle and horses. The sun beats down on the rugged land as they ride their horses, checking on the animals and making sure they have enough water and food.
The Haught family's ranch is surrounded by tall cacti and dusty trails that lead to wide open spaces. Their days are long and hard, but they love the peace and quiet of the desert. They often sit by the campfire at night, listening to the howls of coyotes in the distance.
Despite the challenges of ranching in the harsh Southwest, the Haught family is dedicated to their animals and land. They know that the work is tough, but they wouldn't trade it for anything. The sound of hooves on the dusty ground and the sight of the sun setting over the rugged landscape make their hearts full.
Ranching in the Southwest is not easy, but for the Haught family, it is a way of life that they cherish every day.