Homework Help: English

Posted by sana on Thursday, October 28, 2010 at 12:47pm.

Dear teachers ...
please read this paragraph .i know it if full of error but plz help me.

I particularly liked Erasmus view that people should not care if other humans hiss at them as long as they applaud themselves. I love the idea that it is a good to praise yourself when no one else will do it for you. After reading the story, I realized that today’s world is completely different from Erasmus‘s world. Today, we care about people when we make decisions about ourselves, even if it is regarding to our appearance, Style, and speech. A few days ago, an article caught my attention in newspaper that 80 percent people make their decisions because they are afraid of others people‘s judgments. They don’t choice what they are at best and what they like most. In contract folly is above to all because she thinks all great actions depend upon her. She is the best at everything. For instance she thinks what a big deal if her speech is unprepared but she is genuine by birth. “I was certain that none of you is so wise” (1925). She empahis that importance secret ingredient of the happiness life is “the spice of folly” (1925)

English - Writeacher, Thursday, October 28, 2010 at 1:41pm
I don't know what your assignment said, so I hope the use of first person ("I") is OK. Read and compare yours and mine very carefully so you catch everything -- punctuation, etc.

I particularly liked Erasmus's view that people should not care if other humans hiss at them as long as they<~~Who are "they" and "themselves"?~~> applaud themselves. I love the idea that it is a good to praise yourself when no one else will do it for you. After reading the story, I realize that today’s world is completely different from Erasmus's world. Today, we care about people when we make decisions about ourselves, even if it is regarding to our appearance, style, and speech. A few days ago, an article caught my attention in our newspaper that 80 percent of people make decisions because they are afraid of other people's judgments. They don’t make decisions based on what they are and what they like most. In contrast, folly is above to all<~~What? because she<~~Who is "she"? ~~> thinks all great actions depend upon her. She is the best at everything. For instance she thinks what a big deal if her speech is unprepared but she is genuine by birth. “I was certain that none of you is so wise” (1925). She emphasizes that important secret ingredient for the happiness life is “the spice of folly” (1925). <~~You REALLY need to clarify this last part. You threw this "she" in there with no connection, no identification, etc.

Answer this Question

Related Questions

SraJMcGin plz read - Please read where I wrote the paragraph. Thanks so much!
English - Some readers view Beowulf as a boastful glory seeker. Other readers ...
To Ms. Sue - Ms. Sue you know the English paragraph I was working on right, well...
Englis - Dear teachers ,Please read this paragraph and fix the errors.please...
physcis problem ,please help - A resistance in a circuit is 470§Ù &...
math - in one elementary school class the following information on sports ...
English - 1. I liked the work very much because I could help orphans who needed ...
english - One of the four underlined sections may mark an error in punctuation. ...
English - 1. I especially liked the acting of the main actor and special effects...
English read my paper please - I have done the paper. can you please read if for...

For Further Reading

First Name:
School Subject:
Answer: