The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

Question

The child held on to his mother as the train went by the platform.

Revise the sentence by making the underlined words more precise, adding at least one adjective or adverb, and adding at least one sensory detail.

(2 points)

Answer 1

The young child tightly clung to his mother's hand as the loud, rumbling train sped by the crowded platform, its powerful engines vibrating the ground beneath their feet.