Original—Our faith in visions of fundamental change as mutual respect and understanding between our races come in the path of spiritual awakening. Certainly there have been times when we may have delayed this mutual understanding by being slow to assume a fuller share of our national responsibility because of the denial of full equality. And yet, we have always been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We have fought for the democratic principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, equality at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We have fought to preserve one nation, conceived in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America with all her imperfections, not so much for what she is, but for what we know she can be.

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Original—Our faith in visions of fundamental change as mutual respect and understanding between our races come in the path of spiritual awakening. Certainly there have been times when we may have delayed this mutual understanding by being slow to assume a fuller share of our national responsibility because of the denial of full equality. And yet, we have always been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We have fought for the democratic principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, equality at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We have fought to preserve one nation, conceived in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America with all her imperfections, not so much for what she is, but for what we know she can be.

Paraphrase—Our faith in fundamental change as mutual respect between our races come in the path of awakening. There have been times when we have delayed this understanding by being slow to assume a full share of our national responsibility because of the denial of equality. We have been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We fought for principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We fought to preserve one nation, in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America not for what she is, but for what we know she can be.
Why is the above not a good paraphrase of Mary McLeod Bethune's passage?

It cites Mary McLeod Bethune in a signal phrase.
It only deletes a few words.
It retells the passage in a new way.
It's the writer's own version of the text.

Answer 1

The above is not a good paraphrase because it only deletes a few words from the original passage and does not properly rephrase the content.

Answer 2

The above is not a good paraphrase of Mary McLeod Bethune's passage because it only deletes a few words and does not significantly change the structure or wording of the original passage. A good paraphrase should capture the key ideas of the original passage and express them in a new and original way.

Answer 3

The above is not a good paraphrase because it only deletes a few words instead of expressing the original passage in a new way. A paraphrase should convey the meaning of the original text using different words and sentence structures, while maintaining the same overall message. In this case, the paraphrase merely removes a few words and does not provide a fresh perspective or rewording of the ideas. A good paraphrase should demonstrate a thorough understanding of the original passage and present it in a way that is unique and independent from the original author's word choice.