Original—Our faith in visions of fundamental change as mutual respect and understanding between our races come in the path of spiritual awakening. Certainly there have been times when we may have delayed this mutual understanding by being slow to assume a fuller share of our national responsibility because of the denial of full equality. And yet, we have always been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We have fought for the democratic principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, equality at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We have fought to preserve one nation, conceived in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America with all her imperfections, not so much for what she is, but for what we know she can be.

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Original—Our faith in visions of fundamental change as mutual respect and understanding between our races come in the path of spiritual awakening. Certainly there have been times when we may have delayed this mutual understanding by being slow to assume a fuller share of our national responsibility because of the denial of full equality. And yet, we have always been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We have fought for the democratic principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, equality at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We have fought to preserve one nation, conceived in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America with all her imperfections, not so much for what she is, but for what we know she can be.

Paraphrase—Our faith in fundamental change as mutual respect between our races come in the path of awakening. There have been times when we have delayed this understanding by being slow to assume a full share of our national responsibility because of the denial of equality. We have been loyal when the ideals of American democracy have been attacked. We have given our blood in its defense—from Crispus Attucks on Boston Commons to the battlefields of France. We fought for principles of equality under the law, equality of opportunity, at the ballot box, for the guarantees of life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness. We fought to preserve one nation, in liberty and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Yes, we have fought for America not for what she is, but for what we know she can be.

Why is the above not a good paraphrase of Mary McLeod Bethune's passage?

Answer 1

The above paraphrase is not a good representation of Mary McLeod Bethune's original passage because it omits or simplifies certain key elements of her statement. The paraphrase removes the mention of "visons of fundamental change" and the connection to a spiritual awakening. It also simplifies the concept of mutual respect and understanding between races. Additionally, the paraphrase does not capture the full extent of the struggles and sacrifices made by African Americans in fighting for equality and democracy in America.

Answer 2

The above paraphrase is not a good one because it alters the original passage by removing the mention of "understanding between our races," which is an essential aspect of the author's message. Additionally, it simplifies the language and changes the tone, which can impact the overall meaning and impact of the passage. Paraphrasing should aim to maintain the original meaning and intent of the source material while using different words and sentence structures.

Answer 3

The above paraphrase is not a good one because it simplifies and omits key details from the original passage. The paraphrase removes the mention of "visions," "spiritual awakening," and "mutual understanding." It also removes specific references to historical events and figures, such as Crispus Attucks and the battlefields of France. Additionally, important phrases like "democratic principles," "guarantees of life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness," and "conceived in liberty" are either minimized or entirely left out. Overall, the paraphrase lacks the depth and specificity of the original passage, making it an inaccurate representation of Mary McLeod Bethune's intended message.