(1) The old, dilapidated cabin slumbered under a blanket of dry, dead leaves. (2) The cabin windows were all dirty. (3) Large piles of brown leaves and fallen branches blocked the front door. (4) The stone walkway was barely visible below layers of moss and dirt. (5) The yard was thick with tall grass, weeds, and bushes.
Which of these BEST revises sentence 2 to provide more descriptive detail?
A.
The cabin's windows needed to be cleaned.
B.
The windows of the cabin were messy.
C.
A lot of dirt was on the cabin windows.
D
.
A thick layer of dust clouded the cabin's windows.
D.
A thick layer of dust clouded the cabin's windows.
D. A thick layer of dust clouded the cabin's windows.
The best revision to sentence 2 to provide more descriptive detail is option D, "A thick layer of dust clouded the cabin's windows."
To determine the best revision, we need to look for the option that adds more vivid imagery and provides more specific details about the state of the cabin's windows.
Option A, "The cabin's windows needed to be cleaned," is a less descriptive and more passive statement. It does not provide any specific details about the condition of the windows.
Option B, "The windows of the cabin were messy," is a vague and generic description without any specific details about the messiness.
Option C, "A lot of dirt was on the cabin windows," is a simple statement without any specific details or imagery regarding the dirt on the windows.
Option D, "A thick layer of dust clouded the cabin's windows," adds vivid imagery and provides a specific detail about the windows being covered in a thick layer of dust. This revision paints a clearer picture of the state of the windows, enhancing the descriptive detail of the sentence.