Which revision of the passage makes the best use of transitions?
When you meet the president, shake his hand firmly. Look the
president in the eye when you shake his hand. Speak clearly and
confidently. Ask your questions about his policies politely.
A. When you meet the president, shake his hand firmly. First,
look the president in the eye when you shake his hand.
Second, speak clearly and confidently. Indeed, ask your
questions about his policies politely.
B. When you meet the president, shake his hand firmly. After
that, look the president in the eye when you shake his
hand. At the same time, speak clearly and confidently. Of
course, ask your questions about his policies politely.
c. When you meet the president, shake his hand firmly. Also,
look the president in the eye when you shake his hand. At
the same time, speak clearly and confidently. Finally, ask
your questions about his policies politely.
D. When you meet the president, shake his hand firmly. On the
one hand, look the president in the eye when you shake his
hand. On the other hand, speak clearly and confidently. In
summary, ask your questions about his policies politely.
To determine which revision makes the best use of transitions, we need to consider how effectively each revision connects the different ideas and actions in the passage. Let's analyze each option:
A. This revision uses the transitions "First" and "Second" to sequentially connect the actions of shaking hands, making eye contact, speaking clearly, and asking questions politely. Additionally, the transition "Indeed" emphasizes the importance of asking the questions politely. Overall, these transitions improve the flow and organization of the passage.
B. This revision uses the transitions "After that" and "At the same time" to connect the actions, but it does not provide clear order or hierarchy among the actions. The transition "Of course" is unnecessary in this context and disrupts the flow of the passage.
C. This revision uses the transitions "Also," "At the same time," and "Finally" to connect the actions. These transitions effectively demonstrate the simultaneous occurrence of looking in the eye, speaking clearly, and asking questions politely. The transition "Also" is unnecessary and slightly disrupts the flow.
D. This revision uses the transitions "On the one hand" and "On the other hand" to provide contrast between looking in the eye and speaking clearly. However, this type of contrast does not fit well with the actions described. The transition "In summary" could be improved by using a more appropriate transition, as it does not accurately summarize the actions in the passage.
Based on the above analysis, revision A seems to make the best use of transitions. It provides clear order and hierarchy among the actions while emphasizing the significance of asking questions politely.