I just need an opinion on this Thesis for an essay for TEWWG on why the character doesn't represent Feminism
Janie does not lead a feminist character due to the constant oppression she faces from all three of her husbands, but her feminist power grows stronger from each martial relationship.
Any feedback would be GREATLY appreciated!
you're giving two different arguments in your thesis.
if Janie depends on her the male-dominated setting and thrives off it, this would go towards the argument that Janie is not representative of a feminist character.
on the other hand, if Janie tries to combat the male-dominated setting and the oppression she faces, she is representative of a feminist character.
note that you should expand on Janie not being resistant when she is being oppressed. is it because the presence of males is too overpowering that she has surrendered? or is it because she genuinely prefers to be overpowered?
**I have not read the book so I am basing it off the information you give me.
This makes no sense: “Janie does not lead a feminist character.”
^^^How about: Janie's character is not representative of a feminist character
And to respond to lost, Janie doesn't try to combat the husbands at all and even the author (as it's written in the third person) doesn't mention her taking too much impact from the oppression and she doesn't really feel hurt by it, just a bit conflicted and thats all
that's a much better thesis. you can phrase it as something like:
Jane is a not representative of a feminist character because [list reason here], which conflicts with the feminist concept of [list concept here].
in short, the structure of your thesis should be:
[your stance on Janie being a feminist character], [the reason], [why is it important? why should we care?]
hope this helps!
ok..so I actually decided to change it to this:
Due to her extreme dependence on the male-dominated setting and the constant oppression she faces from all three of her husbands without resistance, Janie does not lead a feminist character.
Thank you very much this helps A LOT :)
Your thesis statement is clear and presents an argument that Janie from "Their Eyes Were Watching God" does not represent feminism due to the constant oppression she experiences from her husbands. However, it also acknowledges that her feminist power grows stronger with each marital relationship. To provide feedback, I would suggest a few adjustments to make your thesis statement more precise and focused:
1. Specify the reasons or aspects of Janie's character that make her representation of feminism unclear. Is it her actions, mindset, or relationships?
2. Define what you mean by "feminist power" to ensure that it is clear how Janie's character evolves throughout the novel.
3. Consider mentioning specific instances or evidence from the novel that support your claim about Janie's lack of representation of feminism.
A revised thesis statement could be:
"Janie's character in 'Their Eyes Were Watching God' does not embody a clear representation of feminism as she faces consistent oppression from her husbands. However, her personal growth and resilience throughout each marital relationship contribute to her eventual realization of feminist power, exemplifying a complex portrayal of feminism."
Remember, this is just a suggested revision, and you can further refine it based on your arguments and the evidence you plan to provide in your essay.