for my comparison essay i have finish the conclusion paragraph. can someone edit it or improve it if possible. also do anybody know how i could conclude my essay.
here the paragraph:
Miley Cyrus’s argument for how every person is an individual is more compelling than Katy Perry’s argument to just express your self. The message reminds me of a saying”It’s not the destination; it’s the journey.” Life is an uphill battle for most of us. The significance of creating successful poetry with this goal is everybody could relate to the message. It had taught me to be my own person, and live life like nobody is watching. There are times in life you got to slow down and tackle every hard things life have to offer to teach you a lesson.
English - Writeacher, Thursday, November 3, 2011 at 8:52pm
Get all forms of "you" and "me" and "us" out of there.