posted by Henry2 on .
Here are some more sentences belonging to the same summary.Thank you very much for helping me.
1) On that particular night, unlike the preceding seven nights, the narrator opened the door with greater caution than the nights before but he made a noise when he was going to open (to shine) the lantern and the old man immediately sprang up in bed and got scared.
2) The old man’s eye was open, which made him angry (furious) and froze his blood. (frightened) He kept still, he didn’t move a muscle and said nothing. 3) (The adverbs referring to the narrator’s actions emphasise the narrator’s effort to convince the reader that he is not mad, and emphasise the care with which the brutal crime was planned and executed)
4) The narrator began to hear the beating of the old man’s heart. The beating of the heart occurs, however, within the narrator himself. (It is established at the beginning of the story that the narrator is over-sensitive –that he can hear and feel things that others cannot).
5) We all know that in moments of stress and fright our own heartbeat increases so rapidly tat we feel every beat. He did not just kill him, but he buried him in the floor of the old man’s room. This was ironic because the crazy man was the old man’s caretaker.
1. Divide this into two sentences - it's too long and convoluted for one. Also, omit "then the nights before" - it's redundant.
2. It's unclear who "him" and "his" and "He" are referring to - the narrator? the old man?
3. Replace "and emphasise" with "as well as"
4. Put that last period before the closing parenthesis, not after.
5. "tat" (spelling?) Clarify the "He" and "him" and "he" and "him." And is "the crazy man" the same person as the narrator??