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Assigment: write a business letter according to the background.
Background:Assume that you’ve worked for the last five years as an
administrative assistant for the Human Resources Department
of Broadworth General Hospital. The Director of Human
Resources, Miriam Hopkins, has charged you with organizing
a two-hour training seminar to be attended by the hospital’s
20 office supervisors. The seminar should cover sexual
harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace.
For the last 20 years, the hospital has contracted all training
through the nationally acclaimed Wydade Consulting
Services. Jeremy Dittmer, employee relations specialist, is
manager of the local branch of Wydade. He requires a threemonth
advance notice regarding any training Broadworth
needs so he can supply an appropriate trainer and any materials
that may be required. This is the first time you’ve dealt
directly with Mr. Dittmer.You must also make all necessary arrangements for the seminar, including time, date,
a room at the hospital for training, any resources the trainer needs, any materials those
who attend might need, and light refreshments for a 15-minute break.
Process:1. Create the necessary details for this scenario—for example, your title, the mailing
addresses for the hospital and consulting firm, the dates, the kinds of training
materials used, and so on.
2. Using either full block or modified block, draft a letter to Mr. Dittmer to set up the
seminar. Your letter must have at least two paragraphs and at least eight complete
sentences. Include the following items in your letter:
a. Thanks for the company’s reliable support
b. An explanation of the training need and any special topics to cover
c. A request for a trainer to teach the seminar
d. A request for a list of resources the trainer will need

This is what I have so far.

Broadworth General Hospital
123 Main St.
Boston, MA 41467

February 13, 2010

Jeremy Dittmer, Employee relations specialist
Wydade Consulting Services
456 Apple Way
Anytown, MA. 12345


Dear Mr. Dittmer,

I am writing to you today to request a trainer to teach an upcoming seminar. But first, I would like to thank you for Wydade’s reliable support in offering all of Broadworth’s training needs for the past 20 years.

The 2-hour seminar is to be held in conference room B on June 30, 2010 at 8:30 am. The topic to be discussed will be on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. There will be 20 office supervisors attending, And light refreshments will be provided for breaks. Also, at your convenience, could you send me a list of resources that the trainer will need.

Please do not hesitate to contact me at 270-843-xxxx if you have any questions.

Sincerely,

Jane Doe

Jane Doe
Administrative assistant


JD

  • business letter - ,

    Capital R and S in Dittmer's title

    No period after MA

    two-hour (not 2-hour)

    twenty (not 20) in two places
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/numbers.htm

    Comma after 2010 in text

    Wordy: "...topic to be discussed will be on sexual harassment ..."
    Better: "topic is sexual harassment..."
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm

    Lower-case "a" in mid-sentence

    Question mark at end of last sentence in second paragraph

    Capital A on both words in Jane Doe's title

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    Revised: And thanks for your help.

    Broadworth General Hospital
    123 Main St.
    Boston, MA 41467

    February 13, 2010

    Jeremy Dittmer, Employee Relations Specialist
    Wydade Consulting Services
    456 Apple Way
    Anytown, MA 12345


    Dear Mr. Dittmer,

    I am writing to you today to request a trainer to teach an upcoming seminar. But first, I would like to thank you for Wydade’s reliable support in offering all of Broadworth’s training needs for the past twenty years.

    The two-hour seminar is to be held in conference room B on June 30, 2010 at 8:30 am. The topic is sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. There will be 20 office supervisors attending. And light refreshments will be provided for breaks. Also, at your convenience, could you send me a list of resources that the trainer will need?

    Please do not hesitate to contact me at 270-843-xxxx if you have any questions.

    Sincerely,

    Jane Doe

    Jane Doe
    Administrative Assistant


    JD

  • business letter - ,

    June 30, 2010 at 8:30 am ~~> ???

    There will be 20 office supervisors ~~> ??

    Keep the comma after "attending," and return that "A" to "a" -- there is no need to start a new sentence here, in addition to NOT starting a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.

    How will you correct these?

  • business letter - ,

    I don't understand the June 30,2010 part. Shall I put June 30th, 2010?
    Corrected:

    There will be twenty office supervisors attending, and light refreshments will be provided for breaks.

  • business letter - ,

    here's the memo part, the email part will come later. and I understand the date and time thing now. I need to put a period between a.m.
    process:
    3. Draft an interoffice memorandum to Miriam Hopkins, the Director of Human
    Resources:
    a. Assume that you’ve received confirmation from Jeremy Dittmer for the date,
    time, and materials needed. The trainer he has assigned is Deb Walker
    b. Outline the arrangements you’ve made, providing explanations as needed. Your
    goal is to assure her that you’ve covered all of the details.
    c. Invent any additional details as needed.

    here's what I have:
    To: Miriam Hopkins
    From: Jane Doe
    Date: February 20, 2010
    Subject: Training seminar


    Arrangements have been made for the sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination training seminar on June 30, 2010. It will last for two hours in conference room B. It will begin at 8:30 a.m. Deb Walker will be the trainer. Materials and refreshments will be furnished. A fifteen minute break is scheduled .

    All office supervisors must attend.

    If you have any questions, don’t hesitate to call me (x261)



    JD

  • business letter - ,

    have you done the e-mail.can you send me a copy of it.i wnat to have an idea

  • business letter-email - ,

    To: Deb.Walker wydadecscom<Deb Walker>

    CC: Jeremy.Dittmer wydadecscom<Jeremy Dittmer>,m.hopkins BroadworthGHorg<Miriam Hopkins>

    Subject: Broadworth General Hospital Training Seminar


    Dear Ms Walker,

    I am writing to confirm the training seminar held at Broadworth General Hospital Training Seminar. The seminar will be held at 8:30am on February 12, 2011. The small conference room on the west wing of the hospital is where you can setup your supplies. Check in with the receptionist in the west wing lobby to inform me of your arrival.

    If you have any questions please feel free to contact me at (xxx)xxx-xxxx

    Signature
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