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is this a good thesis The Merriam-Websters defines suspense as “a feeling or state of nervousness or excitement caused by wondering what will happen.” In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

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  1. The Merriam-Websters defines suspense as “a feeling or state of nervousness or excitement caused by wondering what will happen.” In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

    All of this is factual. No one would disagree with anything in here. Therefore, it's not a thesis statement.

    HOWEVER ... consider only the last sentence and tell us your opinion about all that. Here's a way to come up with your own opinion about something literary: Start a next sentence with "This means that ... " and then finish it in your own words.

    Please re-post when you've done that, even if you come up with two or three ways to complete it.

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  2. ok wait i repost the question?

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  3. No ... try this:

    In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

    Start a next sentence with "This means that ... " and then finish it in your own words.

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  4. ok

    umm

    In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story. This means that Connell creates different aspects to catch the reader attention and keep them wondering until the end

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  5. That's still factual. Who would disagree??

    Your thesis statement must include factual information (which you already have) plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position/opinion on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
    This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

    Please try again.

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  6. The Merriam-Websters defines suspense as “a feeling or state of nervousness or excitement caused by wondering what will happen.” Richard Connell's best books and short stories include; Gretna Greenhorns, Honor Among Sportsmen,terrible epps, and so much more. The most famous one is "The Most dangerous Game" In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

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  7. ok i'll try again

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  8. The first part is not part of the thesis statement. It's part of your introduction.

    A thesis statement is SINGULAR!! It's one sentence. Please concentrate only on this part:

    The most famous one is "The Most dangerous Game" In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

    This makes no sense.

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  9. i really don't know what to put

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  10. This part of that sentence sounds very "canned," as if it came from Sparknotes or eNotes or somewhere:

    ... the author’s use of irony, choice of setting details, and selection of a chronological text structure create suspense in the story.

    How can you put that into your own words AND emphasize the suspense he created? Which of those three elements creates suspense the best? (Think about the story's ending.) How does the story end? Did you have to read it 3 or 4 times to "get it"??

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  11. no my teacher helped me on it

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  12. i think the Choice os setting creates a better suspense.

    the story ends when At the end of the story General Zaroff believes that Rainsford has simply given up and jumped off the cliffs and into the sea to meet his death. He is actually disappointed that Rainsford chose this method of death as opposed to finishing the game. Rainsford jumped, but not to his death and he hikes back to General Zaroff's home and hides behind his curtain to lay in wait for the hunter. The roles now swiftly change and Rainsford is now waiting for his prey instead of being the prey. Zaroff retires to his room, disappointed in the game for the night and Rainsford reveals himself and declares victory by sending Zaroff out to his killer hounds and sleeping restfully in Zaroff's big beautiful bed.

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  13. So ... Irony is the big player at the end then, right?? Do you understand why?

    Rearrange the three elements in your last sentence so that irony is named last, not first. Then insert "most of all" (or some similar qualifier) immediately in front of the word "irony."

    Then repost.

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  14. ok

    In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of choice of setting details, selection of a chronological text structure and most of all irony, create suspense in the story.

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  15. OK ... Now put a comma after "and" and before "most" and you'll be all set!

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  16. Also, make sure that the explanations and examples you give in your paper are in the same order as in this sentence. Do you get why?

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  17. no

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  18. so that's my thesis statement.

    when i'm writing my paper it will go like

    The Merriam-Websters defines suspense as “a feeling or state of nervousness or excitement caused by wondering what will happen.” In “The Most Dangerous Game,” by Richard Connell, the author’s use of choice of setting details, selection of a chronological text structure, and, most of all irony, create suspense in the story.

    and that's it?

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  19. This reads like a thesis statement for a 5-paragraph essay. Here's how I would predict the outline for the content of the paper, judging from this thesis statement:

    I. Introduction, ending with the thesis st
    II. Paragraph about the setting
    III. Paragraph about the chronological structure
    IV. Paragraph about the irony
    V. Conclusion

    When organizing information for papers like this, you want to save your most powerful reason or example for last. You have indicated that when you include "most of all" in your thesis. That's also your opinion -- that irony was the most powerful element the author used to create suspense.

    It should be a good paper!

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  20. ok i'll keep you informed when i finish so you can check later

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  21. thank you so much

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  22. Comma placement correction ...

    ... chronological text structure, and, most of all, irony create suspense in the story.

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  23. You're welcome. =)

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