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Community Service Description Grades(s) Hrs/wk wk/yr
BuildOn Raised $2,000 through active fundraising and community
service, donated all funds to Malawi, lived with a host 10 56 4
family for a week to fully ascertain their lifestyle, and
built a school to help support the poverished and
illiterate nation.
MYOAmericorps Served as an MYO Recruit by actively
advocating the importance of preventing 11 40 8
teen dating violence to the younger Bridgeport
community through a variety of community
service activities. Received a $1675 scholarship, became certified member of AmeriCorps.
Red Cross Club Worked in conjunction with the local chapter 11 12 3 36
of the American Red Cross through charitable
fundraising, active communication, education, and
blood drives.
Pink Ribbon Club Actively raised awareness of breast cancer
through numerous community service activities 11 12 3 31
such as fundraising and awareness promotion
avocations, in which all proceeds were donated
to the American Cancer Society.
Habitat For Volunteered at the ReStore, Habitats charitable
Humanity store that sells donated items to help make a profit to 9 10 11 12 6 38
fund Habitat's relief efforts, built houses for disabled
veterans, participated in fundraisers and charity auctions,\
Youth Inc Jr. Created Youth Inc Jr., a subdivision of Habitat For
Humanity that utilizes the volunteer work of those 16
and younger, volunteers of Youth Inc Jr. are instilled with 11 12 2 38
valuable work ethic skills at a young age and are utilized to
support Habitat's relief efforts through active involvement
with charitable tasks.
Employment Description School Grade(s) hrs/wk wk/yr
Solicitor Solicited possible clients for Interface LLC 12 13 32
Legal Secretary Client support, administrative duties, documentation 10 39 8
preparation, managing projects, editing lawyer’s files,
and setting schedules
Sales Associate operated cash and stock, assisted in year end
at Icing inventory and cycle counts, handled the cash 11 13 30
register, initiated daily revenue through utilizing communication skills with shoppers and assured
quality customer service to customers.
Educational Affiliations Description School Grades(s) hrs/wk wks/yr
Yale Summer
Journalism Program Wrote a 4 page essay on how my future plans in
cultivating writing and its importancein my life
in order to be offered admission to the program 10 11 36 1
, participated in intense reading and writing workshops,
produce quality journalism for the Yale Daily News
Composition Docent Volunteered to mentor middle school aged
Mentorship Program children on developing their reading and calligraphy
skills. Responsibilities included managing large groups 11, 12 3 45
of children, working in accordance with a team of
volunteers effectively, creating new and insightful
activities and leading group discussions.
Honors and Awards Description School Grade(s)
Girl Scout Gold Award Cordially mentored troop in camping at Mashamoquet Brook, coordinating fundraisers and activities, and selling Girl 11 Scout cookies.
Psychology Won first place in final Psychology project competition. The winning 11 Project project included writing a 5 pg essay on the cognitive affects of Award genetic algorithm on intellectual performance, producing a well developed poster board and presentation plan, and effectively proposing findings to the class.
Is this resume for getting into college? or for finding a job after college graduation?
Is it to be in a printable format so that it all fits on one page? Or is it to be acceptable as an electronic resume? Or both?
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Be sure to read through many of these to see what format you want to use, etc.
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its for a college and will be sent electronically. Is it developed enough?Is there anything that sounds wrong or that needs to be elaborated on?
I think it's wordy in places.
Capitalization and some punctuation need work, too. I have no experience with electronically submitted resumes, though, so the missing capital letters and punctuation may not matter.
where is it wordy to you
This is one:
Psychology Won first place in final Psychology project competition. The winning 11 Project project included writing a 5 pg essay on the cognitive affects of Award genetic algorithm on intellectual performance, producing a well developed poster board and presentation plan, and effectively proposing findings to the class.
other than that do you think it could improved at all
Go through it all and cut as much excess wording as possible. As it is right now, it's far too long, whether formatted and printed or sent electronically.
The best resumes can be printed on one side of one page ... mostly because the people reading them don't have time to waste on too-long resumes. In fact, many (I've heard) make up their minds in the first 3 or 4 lines whether they'll continue reading it.
To edit or improve this information, you can consider the following points:
1. Consistency: Make sure that the formatting, spacing, and capitalization are consistent throughout the document. This will make it look more professional and organized.
2. Clear headings: Use clear and concise headings for each section, such as "Community Service," "Employment," "Educational Affiliations," and "Honors and Awards." This will make it easier for the reader to find the information they are looking for.
3. Bulleted lists: Instead of using a paragraph format, consider using bullet points or lists to clearly separate and present each accomplishment or experience. This will make it easier to read and understand.
4. Descriptive language: Use descriptive language to explain each activity or achievement. Include specific details about what you did, the impact you made, and any specific skills or knowledge you gained from the experience.
5. Quantify your achievements: When possible, include specific numbers or statistics to quantify your accomplishments. For example, instead of saying "raised awareness of breast cancer," you could say "raised $2,000 through fundraising for breast cancer research."
6. Focus on relevance: Highlight the experiences, achievements, and skills that are most relevant to the purpose of your document. Tailor the information to the specific audience or purpose, such as a job application or college application.
By following these tips, you can improve the clarity, organization, and impact of your document.