I know you told me not to post a rough draft, but I have only written three paragraphs and I am struggling to write the others. Even so, could you evaluate the paragraphs I have already written and tell me of what could be improved or improvised. Thank you.
"Location: The city of Chicago is located in northeastern Illinois, upon the southwestern shores of Lake Michigan. As it is the principal city in Chicago Metropolitan Area, it is also situated in the Midwestern United States and the Great Lakes region. Therefore, Chicago rests upon a continental divide at the site of what is known to local residents as the Chicago Portage, providing a connection between the Mississippi River and the Great Lakes watersheds. It also lies beside Lake Michigan, while both the Chicago River and the Calumet River flow entirely or partially through the city.
Place: Over the course of time, Chicago has become a highly industrialized city, in which have drawn millions of tourists from many different parts of the world. Upscale shopping along the Magnificent Mile and State Street, thousands of restaurants, as well as Chicago’s eminent architecture continues to attract tourists to this day. Various cultures are also found in diverse aspects of this city, such as in cuisine, literature, religion, entertainment, and in the performing arts. However, the undesirable climate—the humid continental climate—has been known to be the downfall of this lure of tourists to the “Windy City,” despite the fact that many of them eventually settled there. Even so, to most, it is still a city of lights and wonder, filled with marvelous displays of architecture, lust public parks, historical monuments, and magnificent public art.
Movement: As this great, magnificent city possesses a large population, the geographic theme of movement comes into play. Chicago is a major transportation center in the United States. It is a significant component in global distribution, as it is the third largest inter-modal port in the world after Hong Kong and Singapore. However, it has not forgotten about its citizens and their needs of transportation. In fact, expressways, transit systems, airports, and several major port facilities have been either built or run through this city, providing residents with diverse options of travel."
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chicago
Dont copy
I deeply apologize. I will rewrite my paragraphs. I couldn't find any adequate videos to watch pertaining this city and I am supposed to complete this report today. I am truly struggling. Even so, I will not do so again.
Bobpursley is absolutely right. We do not tolerate plagiarism. Most teachers would fail you on this assignment if you plagiarize.
I'll start you out on your first paragraph.
Chicago's absolute location is about 42 degrees North latitude and 87 degrees West longitude. It's on the southwestern shore of lake Michigan in the northeastern part of Illinois.
That's all you need to write about its location.
Now, for the next paragraph, describe the city as a unique place. Write it in your own words. What would you see if you visited there?
Watch this video and look at these pictures.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4r5WSrMKGkI
http://www.google.com/search?q=chicago+images&rlz=1C1AVSX_enUS414US423&espv=210&es_sm=122&tbm=isch&tbo=u&source=univ&sa=X&ei=v3tkUuj6EOP0yQHz6oDoDg&sqi=2&ved=0CCkQsAQ&biw=711&bih=453
Over the course of time, Chicago has become a highly industrialized city, in which have drawn millions of tourists from many different parts of the world. In fact, shopping along the Magnificent Mile and State Street, a numerous variety of restaurants, as well as Chicago’s notorious architecture, such as the cloud gate known as “The Bean,” continues to attract tourists to this day. Therefore, various cultures are found in diverse aspects of this city, such as in cuisine, literature, religion, entertainment, and in the performing arts. However, the undesirable climate—the humid continental climate—has been known to be the downfall of this lure of tourists to the “Windy City,” despite the fact that many of them eventually settled there. Even so, to most, it is still a city of lights and wonder, filled with marvelous displays of architecture, lust public parks, historical monuments, and magnificent public art?
No! No! No! Yccchhhh!
These are not your words!
Don't bother posting any more of your plagiarized report.
What are you talking about? The only paragraph I attempted to copy was the one pertaining about the geographic theme of location, and at least a sentence of the paragraph of movement. I wrote this.
OK.
This reads more like a travel brochure than a report.
What improvements do you suggest, then?
Get rid of some of the glowing adjectives.
That's all I can suggest.