is this a good essay. please help me on words that will make the essay better, advice if any sentence is wrong. and anything that can make the essay sound more mature/professional than what it is, punctuation, capitalization, clarity, etc.
A good argument is convincing, effective, and reasonable, but a powerful argument has so much more. The newspaper argument is more effective than traditional school calendar argument for many reasons. Not only does it have more evidence and supporting details, but it also shows more structural component of an argument. In addition it employs a greater variety of methods, and has more logical and emotional appeals. Overall this proves that the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school calendar.
The newspaper argument shows structural components far better than the traditional school calendar argument. Not only does it give all the components but also a better understanding on what you are reading. The traditional school argument doesn't have all the components which are the counterargument, and the rebuttal. In the newspaper article it continuously explains how newspaper should be an elective, and gives good reasons why. For example, "it aims to help students develop tools for life," and "they see gains in both their oral and written communication." It also explains how some question whether or not its worth it for high schools to even publish newspapers since individual students can put their own content on blogs, websites, and facebook pages, and disagreeing by stating that all printed papers are now transitioned to e-newspaper format to meet their clientele where they are on the web. Therefore the traditional school calendar is not a powerful argument because it did not meet the requirements of a powerful argument.
In both arguments they show different type of methods, but again the newspaper argument gives more methods than the traditional school calendar argument. It continuously repeats how and why newspaper should be an elective which shows repetition and reasons why. It also shows prognostication by stating that they compete for jobs as editors, reporters, and designers. And lastly it shows address objections by giving a long argument on her opinion and reason why Ms. Logan should consider newspaper as a class elective. Furthermore the traditional school calendar also shows repetition and reasons why by also continuously stating that there is no need in year-round schedules since there are no positive effects towards it, but it does not show any further methods. This states that the newspaper argument once again gives a better argument by giving more methods then the other argument.
The newspaper argument mostly gives an emotional and logical appeal to the audience. It shows logos or logical appeal by giving details on how they create leaderships, improve their oral and written communication, acquire new meanings to website building, and overall get a better understanding and creating new skills for those who want to study journalism, photography, or web design. It shows pathos or emotional appeal by clearly suggesting that not only would it benefit the school but the students who participate would feel an integral part of the community throughout their positive contributions. Both of these appeals clearly show she is trying to convince the reader by giving reasons, but also convincing the students that they are appreciated by their work by being part of a community. Meanwhile the traditional school calendar also shows emotional and logical appeal. For example, it shows emotional by stating “ an important part of a child’s life is summertime. With year-round schedules, students would hardly have any time to relax.” and shows logical appeal by showing statistics, as proclaimed in the article “since 1980, 95% of schools that tried year-round schedule changed back to a traditional calendar. Although both articles clearly show the use of emotional and logical appeal, it is evident that the newspaper article clearly showed more use of both these appeals.
It is evident that the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school calendar argument by giving more structural components of an argument, better understanding of logical and emotional appeal and employing a greater variety of methods. Overall it gives a better visual and support on those motivated to take action for a future they would enjoy by starting small and making newspaper as an elective.
what are some words i can put the are better than ones i've used. i just want to get an A on this essay but she said she will be looking for clarity, punctuation, grammar, sentences aren't boring, straight to the point, comparison with both articles, and so many more and i just want the final copy to be really good
also does agitate and solve mean to jump straight to the point
Who is your target audience?
I've read only the first paragraph so far, but right off the bat, I can tell you that, in the second sentence, you need to put the two essays' TITLES in there, not just references to their content.
1. Get rid of all "you" instances. Yes, rephrasing will be needed.
2. Get control of the difference between these two words: it's and its.
3. Organization needs LOTS of help. Re-organization is needed, along with some rephrasing.
Here are the instructions I have given before about organizing a comparison/contrast essay. Reorganize your paper to follow the outline I have included:
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Whenever you are writing a comparison/contrast paper (paragraph, essay, research paper), you need to plan it out very carefully on paper first.
Try this:
1. Write all the information about one of your topics on one page.
2. Write all the information about the other topic on another page.
3. Then put them together in this order:
1. Intro
2. All about topic A
~~~2A. detail 1
~~~2B. detail 2
~~~2C. detail 3
~~~2D. detail 4
~~~2E. detail 5
3. All about topic B
~~~3A. detail 1
~~~3B. detail 2
~~~3C. detail 3
~~~3D. detail 4
~~~3E. detail 5
4. Concl.
The number of details for each topic will vary depending on your main points. I would include comparisons (how they are similar) in the introduction and conclusion, but sections 2 and 3 and all those details will be stating and explaining how they are different.
There are two recognized patterns for writing comparison/contrast papers. One is casually referred to as "zig-zag,” but is very confusing for the reader if you don’t use transitions effectively. The other is topic-by-topic (which is what I've outlined above) and is much easier for the reader to follow.
See http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/comparcontrast.html for further help with comparison/contrast writing.
Don't misunderstand me!
You don't need to start from scratch!!
You just need to reorganize what you have, do some rephrasing to smooth things out, and then do the proofreading.
i did some grammar check and i got this also the teacher said to use "newspaper argument" since its a letter and it doesn't have a title. the other one does it is "summer:15 days or 2 1/12 months?"
A good argument is persuading, effective, and reasonable, but a powerful argument has much more. The newspaper argument is more effective than traditional school calendar argument for many reasons. Not only does it have more evidence and supporting details, but it also shows more structural component of an argument. In addition it employs a greater variety of methods, and has more logical and emotional appeals. Overall this proves that the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school calendar.
The newspaper argument shows structural components far better than the traditional school calendar argument. Not only does it give all the components but also a better understanding on what you are reading. The traditional school argument doesn't have all the components which is the counter argument, and the rebuttal. In the newspaper article it continuously explains how newspaper should be an elective, and gives good reasons why. For example, "it aims to help students develop tools for life." and "they see gains in both their oral and written communication." It also explains how some question whether or not its worth it for high schools to even publish newspapers since individual students can put their own content on blogs, websites, and Facebook pages. However Shayne Swift disagrees stating that all printed papers are now transitioned to e-newspaper format to meet their clientage where they are on the web. Therefore the traditional school calendar is not a powerful argument because it did not meet the requirements of a powerful argument.
In both arguments they show the different type of methods, but again the newspaper argument gives more methods than the traditional school calendar argument. It continuously repeats how and why newspaper should be an elective which shows repetition and reasons why. It also shows prognostication; stating that they compete for jobs as editors, reporters, and designers. And lastly it shows address objections; for example it gives a long argument on her opinion and reasons why Ms. Logan should consider newspaper as a class elective. Furthermore the traditional school calendar also shows repetition and reasons why by also continuously stating that there is no need in year-round schedules since there are no positive effects towards it, but it does not show any further methods. This states that the newspaper argument once again gives a better argument by giving more methods than the other argument.
The newspaper argument mostly gives an emotional and logical appeal to the audience. It shows logos or logical appeal by giving details on how they create leaderships, improve their oral and written communication, acquire new meanings to website building, and overall get a better understanding and creating new skills for those who want to study journalism, photography, or web design. It shows pathos or emotional appeal by clearly suggesting that not only would it benefit the school but the students who participate would feel a part of the community throughout their positive contributions. Both of these appeals clearly show she is trying to convince the reader by giving reasons, but also convincing the students that they are appreciated by their work by being part of a community. Meanwhile the traditional school calendar also shows emotional and logical appeal. For example, it shows emotional by stating “ an important part of a child’s life is summertime. With year-round schedules, students would hardly have any time to relax.” and shows logical appeal by showing statistics, as proclaimed in the article “since 1980, 95% of schools that tried year-round schedule changed back to a traditional calendar. Although both articles clearly show the use of emotional and logical appeal, evidently the newspaper article clearly showed more use of both these appeals.
Evidently the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school calendar argument by giving more structural components of an argument, better understanding of logical and emotional appeal and employing a greater variety of methods. Overall it gives a better visual and support on those motivated to take action for a future they would enjoy by starting small and making newspaper as an elective.
"In both arguments they show..."
Who are "they"?
You still need to rephrase so you get rid of all instances of "you" and any of its forms.
There are still vague pronouns in here (that is, pronouns that have no clear antecedent), but overall the paper is okay. Get rid of the "you" references and turn it in. Your reactions to and thoughts about the two articles are fine.
so get rid of the you, and what else
also what does double-spaces mean what are some websites that will help me put it in double spaces since i don't have microsoft word
so like this
A good argument is persuading, effective, and reasonable, but a powerful argument
has much more. The newspaper argument is more effective than traditional school calendar
argument for many reasons. Not only does it have more evidence and supporting details,
but it also shows structural component of an argument. In addition, it employs a greater
variety of methods, and has more logical and emotional appeals. Overall, this proves that
the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school calendar.
The newspaper argument shows structural components far better than the traditional
school calendar argument. Not only does it give all the components but also a better
understanding on what you are reading. The traditional school argument does not have all
the components, which is the counter argument, and the rebuttal. In the newspaper article, it
continuously explains how newspaper should be an elective, and gives good reasons why.
For example, "it aims to help students develop tools for life." and "they see gains in both
their oral and written communication." It also explains how some question whether or not it
is worth it for high schools to even publish newspapers since individual students can put
their own content on blogs, websites, and Facebook pages. However, Shayne Swift
disagrees stating that all printed papers are now transitioned to e-newspaper format to meet
their clientage where they are on the web. Therefore, the traditional school calendar is not a
powerful argument because it did not meet the requirements of a powerful argument.
The two articles show the different type of methods, but again the newspaper
argument gives more methods than the traditional school calendar argument. It
continuously repeats how and why newspaper should be an elective, which shows repetition
and reasons why. It also shows prognostication; stating that they compete for jobs as
editors, reporters, and designers. And lastly, it shows address objections; for example, it
gives a long argument on her opinion and reasons why Ms. Logan should consider
newspaper as a class elective. Furthermore the traditional school calendar also shows
repetition and reasons why by also continuously stating that there is no need in year-round
schedules since there are no positive effects towards it, but it does not show any further
methods. This states that the newspaper argument once again gives a better argument by
giving more methods than the other argument.
The newspaper argument mostly gives an emotional and logical appeal to the
audience. It shows logos or logical appeal by giving details on how they create leaderships,
improve their oral and written communication, acquire new meanings to website building,
and overall get a better understanding and creating new skills for those who want to study
journalism, photography, or web design. It shows pathos or emotional appeal by clearly
suggesting that not only would it benefit the school but also the students who participate
would feel a part of the community throughout their positive contributions. Both of these
appeals clearly show she is trying to convince the reader by giving reasons, but also
convincing the students that they are appreciated by their work by being part of a
community. Meanwhile the traditional school calendar also shows emotional and logical
appeal. For example, it shows emotional by stating, “An important part of a child’s life is
summertime. With year-round schedules, students would hardly have any time to relax.”
and shows logical appeal by showing statistics, as proclaimed in the article “since 1980,
95% of schools that tried year-round schedule changed back to a traditional calendar.
Although both articles clearly show the use of emotional and logical appeal, evidently the
newspaper article clearly showed more use of both these appeals.
Evidently, the newspaper argument is more effective than the traditional school
calendar argument by giving more structural components of an argument, better
understanding of logical and emotional appeal and employing a greater variety of methods.
Overall, it gives a better visual and support on those motivated to take action for a future
they would enjoy by starting small and making newspaper as an elective.