PROOF READING

A nurse was working in ER, during her shift, she see a patient who is having a fever of 101 degree F. The patient also has a open wound on his left leg, the wound is red, painful, swollen, and foul-smelling pus is showing signs of infection. The patient ‘s pain level was 7 that is severe. While she was assessing the patient, a CNA informed her that one of her shift patient, who was receiving oxygen, is having difficulty breathing. ER RN immediately go to patient ‘s room and assess where is the problem. The patient accidently removed his oxygen mask while he was sleeping. Nurse immediacy fixes the oxygen mask and stay with patient until SaO2 remain stable at 96-98%.
Nurse make this decision based on knowledge that airways is always the highest priority and she attend the client who was experiencing the airway problem first because she used Maslow’s Hierarchy of need theory. According to Maslow’s theory, breathing, food, water comes first than any other human body need. Apparently patient with fever and infection need help too but Maslow’s hierarchy of needs is a based on the theory that one level of needs must be met before moving on to the next step.

I see no improvements here. There are still many, many run-ons/comma splices (http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm ) and many verb errors, which I pointed out before.

Examples:

A nurse was working in ER, during her shift, she see a patient who is having a fever of 101 degree F.

Should be this:
A nurse was working in the ER. During her shift, she saw a patient who had a fever of 101 degrees F.

Make corrections, revise, and repost.

i try to correct , but if my english would so better , why would i post for proofreading .

A nurse was working in ER. During her shift, she saw a patient who is having a fever of 101 degree F. The patient has a open wound on his left leg. The wound is red, painful, swollen, and foul-smelling pus is showing signs of infection. The patient ‘s pain level was 7 which was severe. While she was assessing the patient, a CNA informed her that one of her shift patient, who was receiving oxygen, is having difficulty breathing. ER RN immediately went to patient ‘s room and assess where is the problem. The patient accidently removed his oxygen mask while he was sleeping. Nurse immediately fixes the oxygen mask and stay with thepatient until SaO2 remain stable at 96-98%.
Nurse make this decision based on knowledge that airways is always the highest priority and she attend the client who was experiencing the airway problem first because she used Maslow’s Hierarchy of need theory. According to Maslow’s theory, breathing, food, water comes first than any other human body need. Apparently patient with fever and infection need help too but Maslow’s hierarchy of needs is a based on the theory that one level of needs must be met before moving on to the next step.

Just by addressing comma splices and being aware of verbs, this is better! You should be proud of yourself ... English is NOT an easy language to learn, I know!

It's not perfect, but it's better. I'll post the whole corrected version in a few minutes. Once it's posted, be sure to study the changes I make and ask questions about any corrections you don't understand, OK?

Compare your second post very carefully with the following:

A nurse was working in ER. During her shift, she saw a patient who had a fever of 101 degrees F. The patient had an open wound on his left leg. The wound was red, painful, swollen, and foul-smelling. Pus is a sign of infection. The patient’s pain level was 7, which is considered severe. While she was assessing the patient, a CNA informed her that one of her shift patients, who was receiving oxygen, was having difficulty breathing. The ER nurse immediately went to that patient‘s room and assessed the problem. The patient had accidently removed his oxygen mask while he was sleeping. The nurse immediately fixed the oxygen mask and stayed with the patient until his SaO2 remained stable at 96-98%.
The nurse made this decision based on knowledge that airways are always the highest priority. She attended to the client who was experiencing the airway problem first because she used Maslow’s Hierarchy of need theory. According to Maslow’s theory, breathing, food, and water come before any other human body needs. Apparently, the patient with fever and infection needs help, too, but Maslow’s hierarchy of needs is a based on the theory that one level of needs must be met before moving on to the next step.

Thank you

You're welcome. Keep working on verbs, complete sentences, singulars and plurals, and articles.

=)

Proofreading:

"A nurse was working in the ER during her shift when she saw a patient who had a fever of 101 degrees F. The patient also had an open wound on his left leg, which was red, painful, swollen, and emitting foul-smelling pus, indicating signs of infection. The patient's pain level was a 7, which is considered severe. While she was assessing the patient, a CNA informed her that one of her shift patients, who was receiving oxygen, was having difficulty breathing. The ER RN immediately went to the patient's room to assess the problem. It was discovered that the patient had accidentally removed his oxygen mask while sleeping. The nurse promptly fixed the oxygen mask and stayed with the patient until the SaO2 levels remained stable at 96-98%.

The nurse made the decision to prioritize the patient experiencing the airway problem based on the knowledge that the airway is always the highest priority. She followed Maslow's Hierarchy of Need theory, which states that the basic physiological needs such as breathing, food, and water must be met before addressing any other needs. Although the patient with fever and infection also required assistance, Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs theory emphasizes that each level of needs must be fulfilled before moving on to the next step."

Explanation of Proofreading process:
1. Read the text carefully: Start by reading the text to understand the content and context.
2. Identify grammatical errors: Look for any errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, punctuation, and capitalization.
3. Correct spelling mistakes: Check for any misspelled words and correct them.
4. Improve clarity and coherence: Rearrange sentences or rephrase phrases to improve the flow and clarity of the text.
5. Ensure consistency: Check if there is consistency in verb tense, pronoun usage, and style throughout the text.
6. Check for missing or repeated words: Look for any missing words or repeated phrases and correct them.
7. Review punctuation: Verify the correct usage of commas, periods, question marks, and quotation marks.
8. Double-check terminology: Make sure any medical or technical terms are used correctly and accurately.
9. Clarify any ambiguous statements: If any statements are unclear, ensure they are revised to provide clarity.
10. Final read-through: Re-read the text to ensure all changes are accurate and the text flows smoothly.