Can you proofread my paper? The assignment was to write a five-paragraph essay comparing Anne Bradstreet's two poems to Puritan writing.
Trusting in God
Have you ever wondered what life will be like if you depended on someone else for everything? The writing of both the Puritans and poet Anne Bradstreet shows us what that was like. “ In the poems, “Burning the House” and “By Night when Others Soundly Slept,” have examples that reflect on Puritan writing.”
What is Puritan writing? Puritan writing was wrote very plainly. Their writing was written in diaries and history was important forms of their literature. They wrote on Godly beliefs because the believed in spiritual compact between God and humanity to pave American constitutional democracy.
“Burning the House” is the first poem used to support Puritan writing. First example of is “In silent night when rest I took, for sorrow near I did not look. I wakened was with thundering noise and piteous shrieks of dreadful voice. That fearful sound of “Fire!” and “Fire!” and let no man know is my desire. “ I, starting up, the light did spy, and to my God my heart did cry to strengthen me in my distress. Anne Bradstreet’s first poem reflected Puritan writing by showing her calling to God for help.
“By Night when Others Soundly Slept” is the second poem used to support Puritan writing. Second example is “I sought him whom my Soul did Love, with tears I sought him earnestly. He bowed his ear down from above and in vain I did not seek or cry.” Again she wrote on something she agrees with like the Puritans centering her life around God.
In conclusion, both of Anne Bradstreet’s poems “Burning the House and By Night when Others Soundly Slept” reflect on Puritan writing. Puritan writing is mainly written to discuss biblical events as a model for their lives. Do you agree that these poem reflect Puritan writing?
You are prone to cliche, and you need to examine that in your own proofreading. Examples: to pave American constitutional democracy. ; something she agrees with like
Secondly, you need to simplify sentences. Simple is better.
Examples: The writing of both the Puritans and poet Anne Bradstreet shows us what that was like.
why not The writing of both the Puritans and poet Anne Bradstreet illustrates life dependent on God.
2. Again she wrote on something she agrees with like the Puritans centering her life around God.
why not...Again, she wrote on the
God centered life.
You have a lot of misplaced quotes, it seems to me, I have difficultly telling where and when quotes end.
Finally, your conclusion is weak. Do you really mean "reflect" in the first sentence, or do you mean reflects Puritan writing.
The second sentence is trite. Keep it simple, straight forward, that makes strong thoughts...why not Puritan writing links biblical events and God to peoples lives.
The last sentence is just asking for it. Why ask it? Tell them what you told them...such as
Certainly these two Bradstreet poems reflect Puritan values.
That sentence is strong, and concludes your thesis. Asking a question is the beginning of a new dialogue, and you don't want that.
Any more suggestions?
Work on what Bob has suggested/told you above. Then re-post when you've revised, rewritten, and proofed yourself.
Someone here will read it again for you, but not a rough draft. Be sure to do at least one round of proofing on your own before you re-post.
Certainly! I'd be happy to help proofread your paper. I will provide suggestions for improvement along with explanations on how to address them.
First, let's address a few grammar and punctuation errors:
1. "Puritan writing was wrote very plainly."
- Correction: "Puritan writing was written very plainly."
2. "Their writing was written in diaries and history was important forms of their literature."
- Correction: "Their writing was written in diaries, and history was an important form of their literature."
3. "They wrote on Godly beliefs because the believed in spiritual compact between God and humanity to pave American constitutional democracy."
- Correction: "They wrote on Godly beliefs because they believed in a spiritual compact between God and humanity, which paved the way for American constitutional democracy."
Now let's focus on the structure and clarity of your paragraphs:
1. Introduction
- The first sentence is a good attention grabber, but it needs to be rephrased for clarity. For example: "Have you ever wondered what life would be like if you had to rely on someone else for everything?"
- The second sentence should be revised to clearly state your thesis: "Both the Puritans and poet Anne Bradstreet provide insight into a life dependent on others through their writing, as seen in Bradstreet's poems 'Burning the House' and 'By Night when Others Soundly Slept.'"
2. Explanation of Puritan Writing
- In your current version, you provide some information on Puritan writing, but it could be expanded and refined for clarity. Consider the following revision:
"Puritan writing was characterized by its simplicity and directness. Diaries and historical accounts were important forms of Puritan literature. They often wrote about their Godly beliefs, as they believed in a spiritual compact between God and humanity that laid the foundation for American constitutional democracy."
3. Analysis of "Burning the House"
- Your explanation of Bradstreet's poem is slightly unclear. Try rephrasing the first example for better clarity:
"In the poem 'Burning the House,' Bradstreet depicts a moment of distress and turns to God for help, reflecting the Puritan practice of seeking divine guidance in times of trouble."
4. Analysis of "By Night when Others Soundly Slept"
- Similar to the previous paragraph, rephrase the second example for clarity:
"In the poem 'By Night when Others Soundly Slept,' Bradstreet's heartfelt search for her beloved echoes the Puritan emphasis on centering one's life around God."
5. Conclusion
- Reword the opening sentence for a stronger conclusion: "In conclusion, both of Anne Bradstreet's poems, 'Burning the House' and 'By Night when Others Soundly Slept,' exemplify the characteristics of Puritan writing, which primarily focused on biblical events as models for their lives."
- The final question can be omitted, as it weakens the conclusion.
Remember to proofread your paper once more after making these revisions to catch any remaining errors. Good luck!