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Hi I'm writing a research proposal and I'm not sure if my thesis is specific enough or needs improvement.

Thesis: Currently in Afghanistan, the lack of an effective method of regulation of the production of the opium poppy continues to obstruct Afghanistan's government from running a stable and secured democratic country.

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asked by jason
  1. This statement is more of a history of the problem than a statement of what you think needs to be done.

    The thesis needs to say that the Afgan govt. needs to do this and this and this in order to provide a stable democratic government.

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  2. So far, attempts to control the growth of opium poppies in Afghanistan has contributed to instability. Only a small fraction of the fields have been destroyed, and corruption and political bickering among coalition partners determine which fields get destroyed. Most people are strongly opposed to such measures, and the Taliban is regaining control by supporting the opium growers. Large portions of the country are back under its control.

    There was an excellent article on the subject in The New Yorker about four months ago. I will see if I can find a reference.

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    posted by drwls
  3. http://www.newyorker.com/reporting/2007/07/09/070709fa_fact_anderson

    I highly recommend it for good background material on this subject, by a reporter who followed the Opium Eradication Force last year.

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    posted by drwls
  4. I'm having trouble with a specific problems to write about.

    I was thinking about writing about the Opium Bride problem due to the cultivation of opium poppies. From the article, the problem seems to be eradication leads to a rise in Taliban support.

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    posted by jason
  5. I am not familiar with the Opium Bride probem, but it appears you got the same message from the New Yorker article that I did.

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    posted by drwls

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