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Many cities are easily distinguished by their skylines. In such cities--New York and Paris, for example--certain buildings are so distinctive that the buildings have come to represent New York and Paris. Just a glance at the skyline's profile tells the viewer of the profile what city is pictured.
Many cities such as New York and Paris are so distinctive that the buildings have come to represent them. Just taking a glance at the skyline's profile tells the viewer what city is pictured.
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I would clarify just a little:
Many cities such as New York and Paris have such distinctive skylines that the buildings have come to represent the cities. Just taking a glance at the skyline's profile tells the viewer what city is pictured.