Hello, could someone please look over my English/writing assignment. Any input will help. Not finish still working on end. THANKS
A Gift of dying is a Lesson in Living
“The truth is once you learn how to die, you learn how to live.” (Albom, 1997, pg. 82). The poem “Living and Dying“ by Devon McElveen and topic on “death” makes a person reflects on a new perspective on dying. Dying refines recognition on what is truly important in life love, family, friends, faith in God, and making the world a better place. In “Tuesday with Morrie” Morrie tells Mitch the lesson on dying is learning how to live. Death opens many doors for the person who is dying and the people around them, but Morrie desired others to learn this lesson too. Morrie knew his time was limited in this world, but he wanted Mitch to enjoy life not just allowing life to pass him by.
“Living and Dying” by Devon McElveen the poem reminds me of Morrie in “Tuesday with Morrie” “Do I wither up and disappear, or do I make the best of my time left?” (Albom, 1997, pg. 10). We live, love and connect, but never forgotten. The poem express as we grow old we will decay, but idea’s never forgotten. Our minds forget, others remember. A new day, new start, and a new beginning arise when we are towards the dark. To understand what the poet was saying about death, a person would believe death of an individual to be no more than a shift change from one state of existence to another existence. The poet wrote short stories at early age. His first short story was about a crime he witness as a child, and in middle school started writing poems to release stress. The name Devon means Poet in (Celtic).
What is your thesis statement?
although death awaits us all, there is a lesson before dying.
On Dying is a lesson on how to live
Not sure if this right, but two for you to look at.
My Thesis statement. Please check. Thanks again!
1. Although death awaits us all, there is a lesson to all before we die.
2.This is a part of life that everyone becomes aware of sooner or later.
Here's my analysis and feedback on your English writing assignment:
In your introduction, you provide a quote from Mitch Albom's book "Tuesday with Morrie" which states that once you learn how to die, you learn how to live. This sets the stage for your discussion about the poem "Living and Dying" by Devon McElveen and how it explores the topic of death. You mention that death brings clarity about what truly matters in life, such as love, family, friends, faith, and making a positive impact on the world.
You also mention that Morrie, a character in "Tuesday with Morrie," teaches Mitch the importance of learning how to live while facing death. Morrie encourages Mitch to not just passively let life go by, but to actively enjoy it.
In the next paragraph, you continue to discuss the poem "Living and Dying" by Devon McElveen. You highlight a quote from the poem that resonates with Morrie's sentiments in "Tuesday with Morrie." The quote talks about making the best of the time left instead of withering away. You suggest that the poem emphasizes the idea that even though our physical bodies may decay with age, our ideas and memories can live on.
You also provide some background information about the poet Devon McElveen, noting that he wrote his first short story as a child and started writing poems in middle school as a way to cope with stress. You mention that the name Devon means "poet" in Celtic, which further supports the idea that writing and poetry are an important part of his identity.
Overall, your writing is clear and flows well, but there are a few areas where you could improve. Firstly, consider adding more specific examples or evidence from the poem to support your analysis. This will strengthen your arguments and make your points more convincing. Additionally, be mindful of the structure of your sentences and make sure they are complete and grammatically correct.
In terms of getting feedback on your assignment, it's always good to have someone look over your work. You can ask a classmate, friend, or family member to review your writing and provide their input. Alternatively, you can also seek help from a teacher or writing tutor who can provide more in-depth feedback and suggestions for improvement.
Keep up the good work!