Hi I would like proofreading/feedback on my broadcasting story. BTW It's in all caps because that's how our teacher told us to write it.
A MICHIGAN ATTORNEY HAS FILED CHARGES AGAINST THE WIFE OF FORMER BAY CITY BUSINESSMAN… M. VICKTORIA WILSON—THE WIFE OF JOEL WILSON—WAS ARRAIGNED TODAY FOR LYING TO THE POLICE OFFICER DURING THE INVESTIGATION OF A CRIME. THE ALLEGED LIES RELATE TO THE INVESTIGATION OF JOEL WILSON, WHERE HE WAS LIVING AND HIS CONTRACT INFORMATION. DISTRICT COURT JUDGE A.T. FRANK HAS SET HER BOND AT 10,000 DOLLARS. A PRELIMINARY EXAM IS SET NEXT WEEK AT 2:45 P.M. IN SAGANAW’S 70TH DISTRICT COURT
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Saginaw*
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Thanks Ms.Sue.. instead of arraign, do you think charged would work?
No. Arraignment is the formal procedure and is more accurate in this context than charged.
A Michigan attorney has filed charges against the wife of former Bay City businessman, M. Vicktoria Wilson. She was arraigned today for lying to a police officer during the investigation of a crime. The alleged lies pertain to the investigation of her husband, Joel Wilson, including his whereabouts and contract information. District Court Judge A.T. Frank has set her bond at $10,000. A preliminary exam is scheduled for next week at 2:45 p.m. in Saginaw’s 70th District Court.
It seems that your text is written in all caps, as per your teacher's instruction. However, it is important to note that writing in all caps is generally considered shouting and can be difficult to read. In normal writing, it is recommended to use sentence case (capitalize only the first letter of the sentence) or title case (capitalize the first letter of each major word).
If you would like proofreading or feedback on your broadcasting story, it would be helpful to provide the actual text in sentence case or title case. This will make it easier for others to read and provide constructive comments.