we had to write story in correct broadcast form in correct broadcast form, and include the soundbite. Based on this false information
information:
Kalamazoo, Michigan, is experiencing a severe snowfall which began yesterday. Past record snowfalls in Kalamazoo: 12.6 inches in December, 1978. Total for this storm according to the National Weather Service: 13.5 inches. Kalamazoo Mayor Robert Jones says it is a city emergency; all city offices closed; even Western Michigan University is closed! The snowplows were taken off the trucks because of all the nice weather we have been having. The worst damage was caused by a collapsed roof at the Fifth Third bank in downtown Kalamazoo. Three people were injured. A number of WMU students have been skiing through campus. Snow is expected to taper off later tonight. Soundbite from the Mayor: " We has to rig up some snowplows... we used road graders.. there was some damage to the streets because of that.. But as a test of our emergency procedures it was good. All of our police officers are working 15- hour shifts trying to help people. We don't know how long this is going to continue."
Caps are how my teacher says write it.
So,this is how I corrected it:
THREE PEOPLE WERE INJURED BY A COLLAPSED ROOF AT THE FIFTH THIRD BANK IN DOWNTOWN KALAMAZOO. THE NAMES OF THESE INJURED PEOPLE HAVE NOT BEEN RELEASED YET. KALAMAZOO HAS BEEN EXPERIENCING A SEVERE SNOWFALL SINCE YESTERDAY. ALL THE CITY OFFICES ARE CLOSED AS WELL AS WESTERN MICHIGAN UNIVERSITY. THE TOTAL FOR THIS STORM IS 13.5 INCHES. KALAMAZOO MAYOR ROBERT JONES SAYS THEY HAD TO RIG UP SOME SNOWPLOWS SINCE THE SNOWPLOWS WERE TAKEN OFF THE TRUCKS DUE TO PREVIOUS GOOD WEATHER. THEY HAD TO USE ROAD GRADERS, WHICH CAUSED DAMAGE TO THE STREETS. ALL OF THE POLICE OFFICERS ARE WORKING 15-HOUR SHIFTS TRYING TO HELP PEOPLE. ROBERT SAYS THAT HE IS NOT SURE HOW LONG THE SNOWFALL WILL CONTINUE.
The only correction -- and it's a major one. Never refer to an adult, let alone the mayor, by his first name!
thanks Ms. Sue!
You're welcome, Blaze.
To write a story in correct broadcast form and include the soundbite, you need to follow a specific format used in broadcasting. Here's how you can revise and format the given information correctly:
[INTRO MUSIC]
ANNOUNCER: Good evening, this is [Your Name], reporting live from Kalamazoo, Michigan.
NEWS ANCHOR: We begin with breaking news. Kalamazoo is currently experiencing a severe snowfall since yesterday. This unprecedented weather event has caused significant disruptions across the city. Here are the latest updates.
REPORTER: The National Weather Service reports that the total snowfall for this storm has reached a staggering 13.5 inches, surpassing previous records. The last major snowfall in Kalamazoo occurred back in December 1978, with 12.6 inches of snow.
REPORTER: Kalamazoo Mayor Robert Jones has declared a city emergency in response to the severe snowfall. As a result, all city offices, including Western Michigan University, have been closed for safety reasons.
SOUNDBITE: [Insert Soundbite from Mayor Robert Jones]
MAYOR ROBERT JONES: "We had to make some quick adjustments to our snow removal procedures. Due to the prolonged period of good weather, the snowplows were taken off the trucks. We had to rig up some makeshift snowplows using road graders, which unfortunately led to some damage on the streets. However, this unexpected snowstorm provided a valuable test for our emergency procedures. I want to thank all our dedicated police officers who have been working tirelessly on 15-hour shifts to assist our community. As of now, we cannot determine how long this snowfall will persist."
REPORTER: Unfortunately, this severe weather event has not been without consequences. A collapsed roof at the Fifth Third bank in downtown Kalamazoo has resulted in injuries to three individuals, whose names have not been released at this time. Emergency response teams are on the scene, working to ensure the safety of those affected.
REPORTER: Additionally, it seems some WMU students have found a silver lining amidst the wintry conditions, taking advantage of the heavy snowfall by enjoying skiing throughout their campus.
REPORTER: The National Weather Service predicts that the snowfall is expected to taper off later tonight, providing some relief to the snow-stricken city. However, uncertainties remain as to how long this weather pattern will persist.
NEWS ANCHOR: We will continue to monitor this situation closely and provide updated information as it becomes available. Please stay tuned for further updates on this developing story. This is [Your Name], reporting live from Kalamazoo, Michigan. Back to you in the studio.
[OUTRO MUSIC]
By following this format, you can present the information in a broadcast-style story while incorporating the relevant soundbite. Remember to maintain an objective tone and provide accurate, factual information.