Hi i'm trying to write a lead for my Journalism class, tell me which works best. If they both need revised can you point it out?

In Kalamazoo County unemployment for white people is at 10.2 percent, whereas for black people it is at 21.2 percent, according to American Factfinder years estimated 2007-2011

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In Kalamazoo County unemployment for black people is over twice as high as it is for whites, according to American Factfinder years estimated 2007-2011

Definitely your second lead is better.

In the last part >>

according to American Factfinder estimates for 2007 - 2011.

thank you.. Ms Sue do you know for AP style if it is correct to write 2007 to 2011?

No, sorry -- I don't know what AP style is for this. Normally the publication for which you're writing has its own style book.

Both of your leads provide relevant information about the unemployment rates in Kalamazoo County for white and black individuals. However, the second lead is more concise and effectively communicates the disparity in unemployment rates between the two groups.

If you would like to revise your leads, here are some suggestions:

1. In Kalamazoo County, the unemployment rate is 10.2 percent for white individuals and 21.2 percent for black individuals, according to American Factfinder (years estimated 2007-2011). This showcases a significant gap in employment opportunities between the two racial groups.

2. The unemployment rate in Kalamazoo County is more than double for black individuals compared to white individuals, reaching 21.2 percent and 10.2 percent, respectively, according to American Factfinder (years estimated 2007-2011). This highlights the alarming disparity in access to employment among different racial communities.

Remember, when writing a lead, it's important to provide key information, such as the specific location (Kalamazoo County) and the source of your data (American Factfinder).