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i have done an analysis on this book,the trial. i was wondering if someone could look over it and critique it for me.
Franz Kafka was born on July 3, 1883 in Prague, which was then a part of Austria-Hungary. Kafka had four siblings, all of them being girls. He was the eldest child of Hermann and Julie Kafka. Kafka’s family was a Jewish upper-middle class family, with his father owning a dry goods store. As a young child Kafka loved writing plays for his sisters and reading. In June of 1906, Kafka got his doctorate in law. Many of Kafka’s writings were published after his death. In his will, Kafka ordered his friend, Max Brod, to burn all his writings. Instead, Max Brod edited and published virtually everything Kafka wrote that was not yet published at the time.
The Trial, according to Max Brod, was never finished by Kafka. After Franz Kafka died, Brod made some changes to the book, and put it together into what he hoped would make it a good novel.
The Trial is about a man named Joseph K. “one fine morning,” on his thirtieth birthday he wakes up to find two gentlemen in his bedroom. They inform him that they have come to put him under arrest, yet they don’t tell him the charges against him. In fact, he never finds out what he is guilty of. As the reader delves further into the book he/she realizes along with Joseph K. that there is a corrupt justice system at work against Joseph. This government isolates him into thinking that maybe he does not have the right to live anymore. It works through lower officials who claim to know nothing, just that they are doing what they are told. Whenever Joseph asks who it is that has sent them, these warders claim that they have been sent by the Court.
In his quest to prove his innocence Joseph encounters four different women: Frau Grubach, Frau Burstner, Lenin, and Elsa. They all have a role in which they cater to Joseph’s needs. They are either his caretaker/servant (Frau Grubach) or his mistresses (the other three). The author shows some biases against women in the book. This is a resulting factor of his experiences with women in real life. He is quoted as having said that all women are either “s or a nice girl with no room in between.” He is also said to have had an affair with five different women.
Kafka sets the story in an urban and modern geographical location. He does not specifically name a country that it took place in. Instead, he chooses to be vague to show that a corrupt system of government can be in any part of the world. “Down the whole length of the street at regular intervals… there were little general grocery shops… women were thronging into and out of these shops or gossiping on the steps outside.”(43) As one reads this line, one can almost imagine this scene to be right in their neighborhood. It can be the local grocery shop, like Kroger.
As Joseph K. concentrates on proving his innocence, his life spirals out of control. He is thinking about the case every waking moment that his job as bank manager seems to be slipping out of his hands. “The thought of his case never left him now.” He is so overwhelmed about having his name associated with being guilty, that when he has an important meeting with a client he blows it. “K. had actually followed the man’s argument quite closely in its early stages… but unfortunately not for long; he had soon ceased to listen and merely nodded now and then.” (162). This is what the Court wants. It wants to dominate Joseph K.’s life to the point that he loses everything that he cares about. In fact K. is not the only one that the Court tries to dominate. There are many others. In fact one guy named Block has been following his case for “five years” (240) with no progress ever being made on the case.
Furthermore, the Court is a corrupt justice system in that a person who has charges brought against him/her does not know what crime he/she has committed. “The legal records of the case, and above all the actual charge sheets, were inaccessible to the accused and his counsel.” Now that is a twisted justice system. How can a person try to prove their innocence if he or she does not even know the charges agains him. In fact Kafka goes on to say that the most importnt thing ones “personal connections with officials of the Court.

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  1. This is not an analysis of The Trial. It's a brief biography of its author, Franz Kafka.

    This site will give you some valuable tips for writing a book review or analysis.

    http://www.lavc.cc.ca.us/Library/bookreview.htm

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  2. Franz Kafka was born on July 3, 1883 in Prague, which was then a part of Austria-Hungary. Kafka had four siblings, all of them being DELETE "BEING." girls. He was the eldest child of Hermann and Julie Kafka. YOUR FIRST SENTENCES TEND TO BE SHORT AND CHOPPY. IT MIGHT HELP TO COMBINE SOME OF THEM. FOR EXAMPLE. "KAFKA, THE ELDEST CHILD OF HERMANN AND JULIE KAFKA, HAD FOUR SIBLINGS, ALL OF THEM GIRLS." YOU DO NOT NEED TO DO THIS TO ALL OF YOUR SENTENCES, JUST SOME. Kafka’s family was a Jewish upper-middle class family, with his father owning a dry goods store. As a young child COMMA Kafka loved writing plays for his sisters and reading.

    USE NEW PARAGRAPH TO INDICATE CHANGE IN IDEAS, TIME, PLACE OR PERSON. YOU HAVE CHANGED FROM HIS CHILDHOOD TO YOUNG ADULT.

    In June of 1906, Kafka got his doctorate in law. YOU MIGHT WANT TO EXPAND THIS INTO A BETTER PARAGRAPH.

    Many of Kafka’s writings were published after his death. In his will, Kafka ordered his friend, Max Brod, to burn all his writings. Instead, Max Brod edited and published virtually everything Kafka wrote that was not yet published at the time. The Trial, according to Max Brod, was never finished by Kafka. After Franz Kafka died, Brod made some changes to the book, NO COMMA and put it together into what he hoped would make it a good novel.

    I HOPE THIS HELPS. THANKS FOR ASKING.

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  3. Franz Kafka was born on July 3, 1883 in Prague, which was then a part of Austria-Hungary. Kafka had four siblings, all of them being girls. He was the eldest child of Hermann and Julie Kafka. Kafka’s family was a Jewish upper-middle class family, with his father owning a dry goods store. As a young child Kafka loved writing plays for his sisters and reading. In June of 1906, Kafka got his doctorate in law. Many of Kafka’s writings were published after his death. In his will, Kafka ordered his friend, Max Brod, to burn all his writings. Instead, Max Brod edited and published virtually everything Kafka wrote that was not yet published at the time.
    The Trial, according to Max Brod, was never finished by Kafka. After Franz Kafka died, Brod made some changes to the book, and put it together into what he hoped would make it a good novel.
    The Trial is about a man named Joseph K. “one fine morning,” on his thirtieth birthday he wakes up to find two gentlemen in his bedroom. They inform him that they have come to put him under arrest, yet they don’t tell him the charges against him. In fact, he never finds out what he is guilty of. As the reader delves further into the book he/she realizes along with Joseph K. that there is a corrupt justice system at work against Joseph. This government isolates him into thinking that maybe he does not have the right to live anymore. It works through lower officials who claim to know nothing, just that they are doing what they are told. Whenever Joseph asks who it is that has sent them, these warders claim that they have been sent by the Court.
    In his quest to prove his innocence Joseph encounters four different women: Frau Grubach, Frau Burstner, Lenin, and Elsa. They all have a role in which they cater to Joseph’s needs. They are either his caretaker/servant (Frau Grubach) or his mistresses (the other three). The author shows some biases against women in the book. This is a resulting factor of his experiences with women in real life. He is quoted as having said that all women are either “s or a nice girl with no room in between.” He is also said to have had an affair with five different women.
    Kafka sets the story in an urban and modern geographical location. He does not specifically name a country that it took place in. Instead, he chooses to be vague to show that a corrupt system of government can be in any part of the world. “Down the whole length of the street at regular intervals… there were little general grocery shops… women were thronging into and out of these shops or gossiping on the steps outside.”(43) As one reads this line, one can almost imagine this scene to be right in their neighborhood. It can be the local grocery shop, like Kroger.
    As Joseph K. concentrates on proving his innocence, his life spirals out of control. He is thinking about the case every waking moment that his job as bank manager seems to be slipping out of his hands. “The thought of his case never left him now.” He is so overwhelmed about having his name associated with being guilty, that when he has an important meeting with a client he blows it. “K. had actually followed the man’s argument quite closely in its early stages… but unfortunately not for long; he had soon ceased to listen and merely nodded now and then.” (162). This is what the Court wants. It wants to dominate Joseph K.’s life to the point that he loses everything that he cares about. In fact K. is not the only one that the Court tries to dominate. There are many others. In fact one guy named Block has been following his case for “five years” (240) with no progress ever being made on the case.
    Furthermore, the Court is a corrupt justice system in that a person who has charges brought against him/her does not know what crime he/she has committed. “The legal records of the case, and above all the actual charge sheets, were inaccessible to the accused and his counsel.” Now that is a twisted justice system. How can a person try to prove their innocence if he or she does not even know the charges against him? In fact Kafka goes on to say that the most important thing ones “personal connections with officials of the Court.
    In conclusion, The Trial is a success in that, after reading the book, one can come to the conclusion that Kafka meant the story to be a warning against having a corrupt justice system. He uses diction to show that it can be anywhere in the world. It

    i didn't put the whole essay on there

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  4. its not posting the whole essay. i don't understand.

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  5. You may need to type the essay here.

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    Ms. Sue
  6. It still reads as a biography of Kafka's life instead of a book report or book review.

    One thing that would be helpful is for you to type each paragraph in a separate post. That way, each paragraph can be addressed individually. Also, be sure you toss out most of the biography and concentrate on the book review.

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  7. The Trial is about a man named Joseph K. “one fine morning,” on his thirtieth birthday he wakes up to find two gentlemen in his bedroom. They inform him that they have come to put him under arrest, yet they don’t tell him the charges against him. In fact, he never finds out what he is guilty of. As the reader delves further into the book he/she realizes along with Joseph K. that there is a corrupt justice system at work against Joseph. This government isolates him into thinking that maybe he does not have the right to live anymore. It works through lower officials who claim to know nothing, just that they are doing what they are told. Whenever Joseph asks who it is that has sent them, these warders claim that they have been sent by the Court.

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  8. In his quest to prove his innocence Joseph encounters four different women: Frau Grubach, Frau Burstner, Lenin, and Elsa. They all have a role in which they cater to Joseph’s needs. They are either his caretaker/servant (Frau Grubach) or his mistresses (the other three). The author shows some biases against women in the book. This is a resulting factor of his experiences with women in real life. He is quoted as having said that all women are either “s or a nice girl with no room in between.” He is also said to have had an affair with five different women.

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  9. Kafka sets the story in an urban and modern geographical location. He does not specifically name a country that it took place in. Instead, he chooses to be vague to show that a corrupt system of government can be in any part of the world. “Down the whole length of the street at regular intervals… there were little general grocery shops… women were thronging into and out of these shops or gossiping on the steps outside.”(43) As one reads this line, one can almost imagine this scene to be right in their neighborhood. It can be the local grocery shop, like Kroger.

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  10. As Joseph K. concentrates on proving his innocence, his life spirals out of control. He is thinking about the case every waking moment that his job as bank manager seems to be slipping out of his hands. “The thought of his case never left him now.” He is so overwhelmed about having his name associated with being guilty, that when he has an important meeting with a client he blows it. “K. had actually followed the man’s argument quite closely in its early stages… but unfortunately not for long; he had soon ceased to listen and merely nodded now and then.” (162). This is what the Court wants. It wants to dominate Joseph K.’s life to the point that he loses everything that he cares about. In fact K. is not the only one that the Court tries to dominate. There are many others. In fact one guy named Block has been following his case for “five years” (240) with no progress ever being made on the case.

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  11. Furthermore, the Court is a corrupt justice system in that a person who has charges brought against him/her does not know what crime he/she has committed. “The legal records of the case, and above all the actual charge sheets, were inaccessible to the accused and his counsel.” Now that is a twisted justice system. How can a person try to prove their innocence if he or she does not even know the charges against him? In fact Kafka goes on to say that the most important thing ones “personal connections with officials of the Court.
    In conclusion, The Trial is a success in that, after reading the book, one can come to the conclusion that Kafka meant the story to be a warning against having a corrupt justice system. He uses diction to show that it can be anywhere in the world.

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  12. Why is "one fine morning," in there -- in quotations marks, no capital O??

    Delete "against him" after "charges" -- too many instances of "him' in that one sentence.

    The use of "he/she" is very awkward and will get worse as you keep writing. Use "he" or "she" and be consistent throughout the paper.

    Delete "against Joseph" after "work" -- again, it's repetitive.

    The terminology "isolates him into thinking" is strange. How can you rephrase it so it's more accurate?

    "It works..." <~~What is "it"?

    Simplify -- delete "it is that" in the last sentence.

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  13. Delete "the other three" in parentheses -- unnecessary.

    Simplify "a resulting factor" -- "a result" will do.

    In the phrase "of his experiences..." -- whose experiences are "his"? Kafka's or Joseph K's?

    Citation for the quotation in here??

    Only one affair with five different women? Is that accurate??

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  14. The phrase "that it took place in" is awkward. How can you rephrase this?

    After a quotation and citation, the period belongs AFTER the closing parenthesis.

    The word "their" in the next to last sentence does not match its antecedent, "one." How can you rephrase?

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  15. What looks like the second sentence seems to be a run-on. How can you rephrase to make it all clear?

    Where is the citation for the quotation?

    The phrasing "he blows it" is slang. How can you rephrase to make it more formal so it matches the rest of your paper?

    After the second quotation, delete the period immediately after "then" and keep the period after the parentheses.

    The word "guy" is slang. How can you rephrase?

    Following whose case? There's no clear antecedent for "his" in that sentence.

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  16. The use of "him/her" and "he/she" is awkward -- how will you rephrase?

    Citations after the quotations??

    "A person" is singular, but "their" is plural -- resulting in lack of agreement between pronoun and antecedent. How will you correct this?
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/pronouns.htm

    The wording beginning "In fact" needs a comma after "fact," needs an apostrophe in the word "ones," and needs to be made into a complete sentence. As it stands, it's a fragment.

    I know you can't do so in here, but make sure the book's title is underlined or italicized every time!

    "He uses diction" -- what? Every author uses diction. Diction is simply word choice. So what kind of diction is Kafka using?
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Diction

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  17. thank you very much. your advice was very useful.

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  18. Oh, good!

    Let me know if you have further questions. It's a good paper, especially if you omit most of the biographical info. Just keep the info that seems to have affected what he wrote in this book.

    =)

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