Can you proofread my writing?
Real Men Truly Change
What is forgiveness? Forgiveness is when you allow someone to be forgiven for doing something wrong to you or someone else. On February 21, 1988 at the Family Worship Center in Baton Rouge, La, a speech made by Jimmy Swaggart titled, “Apology Sermon, “he wanted forgiveness from his family, friends, and the nation for having an affair. Also, on September 11, 1998 at the annual White House prayer breakfast, Bill Clinton speech titled, “I Have Sinned,” asked for forgiveness for having an affair as well, in the speech. These speeches both showed the same theme of wanting forgiveness, through usage of repetition and word choice.
The theme I got from the speeches, “Every Cloud has a Silver Lining,” was just because something bad happens; there may be a good or bad outcome to the situation. One reason for that is, in the speech both Jimmy and Bill wanted forgiveness from people, and wanted God to wash their sin away. Both men were deeply sincere and confronted the truth instead of lying to the nation. Maybe the situation had a good or bad outcome, we don’t know. However, you learn from your mistakes and you know better next time.
The literary devices such as repetition and word choice also fit examples with the theme and the perspective on forgiveness. When Jimmy Swaggart repeatedly said, “I have sinned against you and I beg your forgiveness. Jimmy wanted everyone to forget what he did and remember the old Jimmy. Also, when Jimmy Swaggart pronounced he wants everyone to forgive him and forget what happened. The same reason he just wanted to be forgave for what he did, though everyone felt like he made a big fool of himself and disappointed people that looked up to him. Bill Clinton, our 46th president said, “Broken spirit,” at the end of almost every sentence of his speech wanting to be a known as a different person, not the person he was when he committed adultery. He was supposed to lead the world in a good manner, but instead, he made a bad name for himself. I felt Jimmy Swaggart speech was more effective than Bill Clinton’s because Jimmy truly went deep in voice and made you truly want to forgive him. Forgiveness is what both these men wanted, so they didn’t have to see hatred in faces and mean slurred words spoke to them.
As you can see, Jimmy Swaggart and Bill Clinton wrote speeches wanting forgiveness for having an affair. These men should have learned a life lesson by this, “Every Cloud has Silver Lining.” Their lucky to still be recognized for the good things they did do. Forgiveness has a true meaning to it and if you truly want you work hard and don’t screw up next time. Do you feel like these men created a problem that impacted our nation and they just want forgiveness? Maybe, so. Are do you feel they just want to be noticed? Probably. Whatever you may think, forgiveness is what these men feel like they deserve and want to better themselves as individuals. What do you think?
Get rid of all instances of "you" and its forms.
Get your comma usage under control (where you need them and where you don't):
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm
Revise and re-post.
Real Men Truly Change
What is forgiveness? Forgiveness is when you allow someone to be forgiven for doing something wrong to you or someone else. On February 21, 1988, at the Family Worship Center in Baton Rouge, LA, a speech made by Jimmy Swaggart titled "Apology Sermon" showed his desire for forgiveness from his family, friends, and the nation for having an affair. Similarly, on September 11, 1998, at the annual White House prayer breakfast, Bill Clinton's speech titled "I Have Sinned" also sought forgiveness for his affair. These speeches both conveyed the theme of seeking forgiveness through the use of repetition and word choice.
To proofread your writing, you could consider the following steps:
1. Read the text aloud: This will help you identify any grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, or missing words that may not be noticeable when reading silently.
2. Check for spelling and punctuation mistakes: Use your word processor's spelling and grammar checker to catch any obvious errors. Also, pay attention to punctuation, ensuring that commas, periods, and other punctuation marks are used correctly.
3. Look for sentence structure issues: Check if your sentences are clear and easy to understand. Avoid overly long or complex sentences, and make sure that your ideas flow logically from one sentence to another.
4. Verify verb agreement: Ensure that your subject and verb agree in number (singular or plural).
5. Review word choice and usage: Be mindful of your word choices and ensure they accurately convey your intended meaning. Avoid repeating the same words too frequently and consider alternative ways to express your ideas.
6. Consider paragraph structure: Check if your paragraphs are well-organized, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea or topic. Make sure you have clear topic sentences and smooth transitions between paragraphs.
7. Seek feedback from others: Ask someone else to read your writing and provide constructive feedback. Another person's perspective can help identify errors or areas for improvement that you may have missed.
Remember, proofreading is an iterative process, so you may need to repeat these steps multiple times to polish your writing.