Can you check my letter. It's a project for English. We are making our writing portfolios. I'm almost done I just have to do this.
Dear Reader,
This year I done some great improvement as a writer. I add great vocabulary in my pieces. When I'm reading, it improve my writing. I learn new vocabulary words while I'm reading. I improve a little when editing, but so far it's going good.
My favorite writing piece I done this year is my reflection essay "Vive la difference". This was one of the best pieces I ever wrote. The theme for the reflection this year was "Diversity Means...". The reason why it's my favorite piece is because I worked really hard in this piece. I bring the essay alive & explains how marvelous & a terrific program it is. I also include how we make a difference in our community.
In 8th grade I will continue to improve my editing skills. I'll try not to go off topic when writing (which happens sometimes). I will read more and more in order for me to improve my writing skills.
My 7th grade English teacher, Mrs. Langenmayr is the BEST English teacher!!! She makes learning in this class FUN! Throughout the school year I read some interesting stories and learn some news things in this class. I did very well on the NYS ELA Exam (hoping I got a 4) thanks to Mrs. Langenmayr. I already know I'm going to do well in my English final. I'm looking forward for next year (hoping I'll be place in honors).
Sincerely,
(my name)
Did you proofread your first paragraph?
Here are the corrections for it:
This year I made some great improvement as a writer. I added great vocabulary words to my essays. When I'm reading, it improve my writing. << This sentence makes no sense. I learned new vocabulary words while I read. I improve my editing a little. So far it's going well.
The rest is better, but still you can improve it.
ok
Thank You! :)
You're welcome.
I goofed -- it should be I improved my editing . . .
yup because it's past tense, it's something i already did
thanks! ;)
I think this is a really good piece of writing.
Dear Reader,
I hope this letter finds you well. I understand that you're looking for someone to check your letter for your English project. I'd be happy to help you with that. Please keep in mind that as an AI, I can only provide suggestions and general feedback. Here's a review of your letter:
Overall, your letter expresses your improvement as a writer and highlights your favorite writing piece from this year. You've mentioned that you have added great vocabulary to your writing and how reading has helped improve your writing skills. It's great that you are aware of areas where you need improvement, such as editing and staying on topic. You've also expressed your appreciation for your 7th grade English teacher and mentioned your hopes for the future.
Here are a few suggestions to enhance your letter:
1. Grammar and sentence structure: There are a few instances where the sentence structure and grammar need improvement. For example, instead of saying "This year I done some great improvement as a writer," you can say "This year, I have made great improvements as a writer." Take a moment to review the letter and ensure that the sentences are clear and grammatically correct.
2. Clarity of ideas: Some of your sentences could benefit from clearer organization of ideas. For instance, in the second paragraph, you mention how you worked hard on your favorite piece but it would be helpful to further explain what the piece is about and how it reflects the theme of "Diversity Means..." This will give the reader a better understanding of your writing accomplishments.
3. Proofreading: It's important to proofread your letter for spelling and punctuation errors. For example, you mention "Vive la difference," but it should be "Vive la différence" to maintain correct spelling and use of accent marks. Additionally, check for consistency in tense usage throughout the letter.
4. Closing remarks: In the last paragraph, you express your hopes of being placed in honors for 8th grade. Consider expanding on why you would like to be placed in honors and how you plan to work towards achieving that goal. This will demonstrate your determination and dedication.
Remember to review your letter thoroughly before finalizing it for your writing portfolio. Pay attention to grammar, spelling, and clarity of ideas. You may also consider getting input from a teacher, classmate, or family member to gather different perspectives and suggestions.
Best of luck with your writing portfolio!
Sincerely,
[Your Name]