please read over my paper for errors?
Where is the paper?
Hi Gail, glad to know you are final back in town. Businesses have really improve since you were here last. The town has more job to offer. I hope you are looking for a new job. My boss Mr. Ray Cooley the own of a dress shop by the name Beauty and Beyond need an assistant for his store. I had to think of you with your many years of experience. The duties would be to keep record of sales, ordering the last line of women dresses. I know you have those skills You are a multi-tasking ,comprassionate and a people person. I know you will do very well with this company. Please tell me when you can come and submitted your application. I will put in a good word for you to him. This is a job that can open many doors for you in the future.
It reads fine. Try this, to work on finding the few errors I see:
Read your paper aloud to someone else, one sentence at a time, from the last sentence to the first.
Make the corrections you hear, and then re-post it.
Hi Gail, glad to know you are final back in town. Businesses have really improve since you were here last. The town has many jobs to offer. I hope you are looking for a job. My boss Mr. Ray cooley, the of a a dress shop by the name Beauty and Beyond. He needs an assistant for his store. I thought of you with your many years of experience. The duties would be to keep record of sales and ordering the latest line of women dresses. I know you have the skills for this job. You are muti-tasking, and a people person. Please let me know if you are interest in this job. I will put in a word for you with the boss. I feel this will open many doors for you in the future.
How come I'm now seeing errors that weren't in our first post?
Hi Gail, <~~salutation needs to be on a separate line from the text of your letter
glad to know you are final back in town.<~~This is not a complete sentence. Also, the word in front of "back" should be "finally" -- if you read this aloud, you probably pronounced it correctly, but didn't get the ending on the word.
Businesses have really improve since you were here last. <~~What correction needs to be made regarding "improve"?
The town has many jobs to offer. I hope you are looking for a job. <~~ok
My boss Mr. Ray cooley, the of a a dress shop by the name Beauty and Beyond. <~~Read this sentence in your first post. It was better there. The revision here doesn't make sense.
He needs an assistant for his store. <~~OK
I thought of you with your many years of experience.<~~OK
The duties would be to keep record of sales and ordering the latest line of women dresses.<~~What needs to happen with the word "record"?
I know you have the skills for this job. You are muti-tasking, and a people person.<~~OK, but there's a spelling error here. Do you see it?
Please let me know if you are interest in this job. <~~What word needs correcting in here?
I will put in a word for you with the boss. I feel this will open many doors for you in the future. <~~OK