Would this be a good start to a short story? And what do you think i should say next?? This is for two things, my English class, and my blog.
Annabelle is a bright, smart and outgoing young twelve year old. Clifford is a easy going, adventurous eight year old. Annabelle and Clifford love to go on big adventures, but this one, was by far their most favorite. Annabelle and Clifford were out taking their dog sally for a walk. When suddenly Clifford shouted "Look over there, something shinny!". Annabelle and Clifford walked over to the mysterious item, and picked it up. Soon to find out that it was a gold coin that was half in the dirt, next to a old tree. Annabelle and Clifford studied the coin for quite some time, until they took it home to investigate it. When they reached their home, their mother, Hilary, called them for lunch. So their investigation will have to wait.
When they returned to their coin, they found it to be missing. They searched far and wide for their missing gold coin, but couldn't find it anywhere. Annabelle was worried that they wouldn't find their coin, but she knew she had to hold it in for her brother. When they looked everywhere they could think of, Annabelle and Clifford decided to take a walk. As they where on their walk Annabelle remembered something. She remembered that sally was with them, maybe she took it. They raced back home, only to find that sally had not taken it.
Dear Paisely Jane - This is a good idea, although it has some grammar and punctuation that needs to be fixed. As for what comes next, well, that could be anything.
Mabye their mother found it and, since it was dirty, decided to clean it up a bit. Maybe their father came home and saw it, then took it into his study to look at it closer.
Or maybe they left the window open and a magipie (a black and white bird that steals shiny objects to put in her nest) decided she liked the coin enough to take it. And yes, magpies are real birds and they really do take shiny things.
These are just some ideas for you, but in the end, where you go with your story is completely up to you!
The start of your short story sets a good foundation by introducing the characters and their adventurous nature. It creates intrigue with the discovery of the gold coin and leaves the reader wondering about its significance.
To continue the story, you could explore Annabelle and Clifford's determination to find the missing coin. You could describe how they brainstorm different places it could be, revisit the location where they found it initially, or even seek help from their friends or neighbors. You could also build suspense by introducing potential suspects or creating obstacles for the characters to overcome.
Consider incorporating dialogue between Annabelle and Clifford to showcase their relationship and their differing approaches to problem-solving. This will add depth to the characters and allow readers to connect with them on a more personal level.
Additionally, think about integrating descriptive language to paint a vivid picture of the surroundings, their emotions, and the atmosphere. This will help immerse readers in the story and make it more engaging.
Remember to keep the pacing of the story consistent, maintaining a balance between action, dialogue, and introspection. This will ensure that readers remain curious and invested in finding out what happens next.
Overall, be creative, have fun with the story, and let the plot unfold naturally as you continue writing!