i need to fix this sentence
"Stop or I'll block you!" the boy yelled.
I replace block with deter instead because it be stronger word but teacher say that it not tell her anything but that i just read the definition of deter.
i not get what she mean by this.
Your teacher means that "deter" is not a suitable word.
Maybe she means that you need a comma after Stop.
thanks very much ms. sue :)
You're welcome, Mohammad.
When it comes to writing, it's important to choose words that convey your intended meaning effectively. While "deter" may be a stronger word, it may not be the best fit in this context. Here's a step-by-step process to help you fix the sentence:
1. Identify the problem: The issue pointed out by your teacher may be that using the word "deter" doesn't provide enough clarity or context in relation to the situation described in the sentence.
2. Think about the message you want to convey: In this case, it seems like the boy wants to give a clear warning or threat to the person he is yelling at. The word you choose should reflect that intention.
3. Use a suitable word or phrase: Instead of "block" or "deter," you could consider using a stronger verb that directly conveys the desired warning. For example, you might try, "Stop or I'll hinder you!" or "Stop or I'll impede you!" These words more explicitly communicate the boy's intention to actively prevent the person from proceeding.
4. Review the revised sentence: After you have made your changes, the revised sentence might look like this: "Stop or I'll hinder you!" the boy yelled.
Remember, it's important to choose words that accurately express your intended meaning while also staying true to the context of the sentence.