REVISED :
Dear Mr. Dittmer:
I am writing to you to request a trainer for our seminar on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace for twenty of our office supervisors. Our company would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for Wydade’s reliable support in offering most of Broadworth’s training needs for the past 20 years.
We would like the seminar to be held on the 14th of September 2012 at 10 am. The seminar is to be two hours long with a 15-minute break where refreshments will be provided. It will be held in our conference room on the first floor in room 105. The topics we need to be covered are ways to prevent, cope with, and report such harassment. At your convenience could you please send me a list of resources the trainer will need in order to make this seminar a success. We would also need to know what our supervisors should bring along with them to the seminar.
If you have any further questions or concerns please do not hesitate to contact me at 802-585-8668.
Sincerely,
Shawna Parker
Shawna Parker
Administrative Assitant
SP
... to be held on September 14, 2012, at 10 am.
... with a 15-minute break where refreshments ...
(Since a break is not a place, you need to replace "where" with "during which" ... )
... further questions or concerns, please contact me ...
(It's always better to state things positively, rather than negatively ... and don't forget that comma there.)
Dear Shawna Parker,
Thank you for your email requesting a trainer for your seminar on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. I appreciate your kind words regarding Wydade's reliable support in providing training for Broadworth over the past 20 years.
To proceed with arranging the seminar, we will need some additional information. Firstly, could you please confirm the date and time you would like the seminar to be held? In your email, you mentioned the 14th of September 2012 at 10 am, but we just want to ensure that this is still accurate.
Additionally, it would be helpful if you could provide us with more details about the seminar itself. You mentioned that the seminar should be two hours long, with a 15-minute break for refreshments. Could you please let us know where the seminar will be held? You mentioned room 105 on the first floor, but it would be beneficial to confirm the exact location.
Regarding the content of the seminar, you mentioned that you would like the topics of prevention, coping, and reporting of harassment to be covered. Is there any specific emphasis or focus that you would like the trainer to have? Any additional information you can provide on the desired outcomes or goals of the seminar would be greatly appreciated.
Once we have these details, we will be able to proceed with finding a suitable trainer for your seminar. In the meantime, I will prepare a list of resources that the trainer will require to ensure the success of the seminar.
Lastly, you mentioned that you would like to know what your supervisors should bring to the seminar. Generally, it is advisable for participants to bring a notebook or any other materials they may find useful for taking notes during the training session. However, please let us know if there are any specific items that you would like the supervisors to bring.
If you have any further questions or concerns, please do not hesitate to contact me at 802-585-8668. Thank you again for your trust in Wydade and for choosing us to assist with your training needs.
Sincerely,
[Your Name]
[Your Position]
Wyadade Training Services