Writeacher, I really need your help to check some mistakes in the word choice:
1) He lives alone because his wedding is broken.
2) It is impossible to switch off the telescreen fully (better completely)
3)The Thoughtpolice observe people 24 hours a day.
4) He is watching on the telescreen a report on the production of pig-iron and the realization of the Ninth Three-Year Plan (of the Party).
5) He changes past events so that to comply with what the Party has told (better: so as to comply with/match (both possible?) the Party's official version of past events).
6) Winston's thoughts (??) change during the novel, in particular at the end of it(???).
7) When O'Brien relizes Winston's behaviour is against the Party, he has him captured by the Thoughtpolice.
8) O'Brien begins to threaten Winston in order to make him doublethink (in order to alter his ability to think independently).
1) He lives alone because his marriage is over.
2) It is impossible to switch off the telescreen completely.
3)OK
4) He is watching a report on the telescreen about the production of pig-iron and the realization of the Ninth Three-Year Plan of the Party.
5) He changes past events to comply with the Party's official version of past events.
6) Winston's ideas change during the novel, in particular at the end.
7) When O'Brien realizes Winston's behaviour is against the Party, O'Brien makes sure Winston is captured by the Thoughtpolice.
8) O'Brien begins to threaten Winston in order to alter his ability to think independently.
1) He lives alone because his marriage is broken.
- The correct word choice here is "marriage" instead of "wedding." "Wedding" refers to the ceremony, while "marriage" refers to the state of being married.
2) It is impossible to switch off the telescreen fully (better: completely).
- "Fully" and "completely" are both acceptable words to indicate the complete action of switching off the telescreen. However, "completely" is more commonly used in this context.
3) The Thought Police observe people 24 hours a day.
- There are no mistakes in this sentence. The word choice is appropriate.
4) He is watching a report on the production of pig-iron and the execution of the Ninth Three-Year Plan (of the Party) on the telescreen.
- The word "realization" is replaced with "execution" to correctly convey the implementation of the Ninth Three-Year Plan. Also, "on" should be used instead of "in" before the word "telescreen."
5) He changes past events so as to comply with/match the Party's official version of past events.
- The word "to" before "comply" is replaced with "so as to" to clarify the purpose or intention of changing past events. Both "comply with" and "match" are appropriate word choices here.
6) Winston's thoughts change during the course of the novel, particularly at the end of it.
- The word "change" is used instead of "changes" to maintain tense consistency. "In particular" is replaced with "particularly" for smoother sentence flow.
7) When O'Brien realizes Winston's behavior is against the Party, he has him captured by the Thought Police.
- There are no mistakes in this sentence. The word choice is appropriate.
8) O'Brien begins to threaten Winston in order to make him doublethink (alter his ability to think independently).
- The phrase "in order to make him doublethink" is replaced with "alter his ability to think independently" for better clarity and understanding. The revised wording conveys the purpose of O'Brien's actions more explicitly.