I need help with my one paragraph (8 to 12 sentences in length) assignment. My biggest problem I believe is my topic sentence (which must be the first sentence of the paragraph). Also I need help with transitioning between one of my sentences.

The following is the scenario that I have been given to form my one paragraph assignment around:
Your cousin has moved to your town and is looking for a job. Her previous experiences are working as a cashier and sales clerk. You know she plans to apply at similar stores in your town but you known she is perfect for a job opening as a reliable assistant to your boss. You know she has the skills, though she doesn't think she is as capable as she is, and you're sure she'd be good at this job. The goal is to persuade her to apply for the job. You e-mail her a paragraph explaining the specifics of the job and the reasons she should apply. You want to convince her that she has the job skills required. You'll use an informal tone but will use the correct business writing to show her that you take your recommendation seriously.

I must use my imagination to create the kind of skills the job as boss's assistant requires, make up names for my boss and the company, as well as any facts that might help prove my case to my cousin.

I must organize details and explain using an order of importance pattern.

I must begin the topic sentence by establishing confidence in my cousin and spark her interest in applying for this job.

This is what I have writen:

Jodi, there is an office assistant job that you need to apply for here at Tekware as I know you have the skills and experience required to preform this job and believe you will be interested in the several benefits it has to offer you. My boss, Ms. Carol Brown, is currently seeking an assistant to organize and file documents, maintain and order office supplies, answer calls and take messages, write and edit documents, and prepare invoices. You will notice that these job duties are similar to the duties you preformed in your previous sales clerk and cashier positions. For example, you have experience in organizing from working at Little Tike Fashions where you were complimented by managers for your ability to maintain an organized clothing display area. Also, you can apply your knowledge of taking inventory, ordering, and restocking of clothing and apply that same process to office supplies. As well, working at Store-Mart gave you the know-how to effectively communicate with customers and will be helpful to you when dealing with clients on the telephone and in person. I know you had intended to apply for cashier and sales clerk positions however, if you apply for this job one benefit is that it pays $3.00 an hour more on average than cashier and sales clerk positions. Another benefit is that this job would beef up your resume by adding job experience in the business field which could land you a better job down the road. However, the biggest benefit of this job is that it’s 9 to 5, Monday through Friday and will therefore allow you to be free in the evenings to take the Business Administration classes that you’ve always wanted. Just imagine, you’ll be able to take classes to achieve your degree and at the same time be able to afford these classes, but all this will not be possible if you do not apply for the job. So please drop off your resume and cover letter at our office before March 1st so that you don’t miss out on this office assistant job.

Jodi, I have a job recommendation that you should seriously consider. There's an office assistant position available at Tekware, and I truly believe that you have the perfect combination of skills and experience to excel in this role. Not only that, but this job comes with several enticing benefits that I'm sure will capture your interest. Let me explain the specifics to you.

Our boss, Ms. Carol Brown, is actively looking for an assistant to handle various administrative tasks. This includes organizing and filing documents, managing office supplies, handling calls and messages, editing written materials, and preparing invoices. These responsibilities bear a striking resemblance to the duties you performed in your previous roles as a sales clerk and cashier. For instance, your experience in maintaining an organized display area at Little Tike Fashions speaks to your ability to effectively organize and maintain order. Similarly, your expertise in inventory management and restocking at Store-Mart will easily translate into managing office supply inventory. Moreover, your previous customer service experience will be immensely beneficial when communicating with clients both over the phone and in person.

While I know you had initially planned to apply for cashier and sales clerk positions, I urge you to consider this office assistant opportunity. The salary for this role is, on average, $3.00 higher per hour than what you would earn as a cashier or sales clerk. Additionally, accepting this job will add valuable business experience to your resume, potentially opening doors to even better career opportunities in the future.

Perhaps the most compelling aspect of this job is its regular 9-to-5 schedule, Monday through Friday. This will afford you the freedom to pursue your long-standing desire to enroll in Business Administration classes in the evenings. Imagine being able to work towards your degree while simultaneously being able to afford these classes—a truly remarkable opportunity that you shouldn't let slip away.

To ensure you don't miss out on this incredible chance, I kindly request that you drop off your updated resume and a well-crafted cover letter at our office before March 1st. Don't hesitate, Jodi, and take advantage of this office assistant position at Tekware. I have complete confidence in your abilities, and I genuinely believe this job will be a perfect fit for you.

Jodi, there is an office assistant job that you need to apply for here at Tekware as I know you have the skills and experience required to perform this job and believe you will be interested in the several benefits it has to offer you. My boss, Ms. Carol Brown, is currently seeking an assistant to organize and file documents, maintain and order office supplies, answer calls and take messages, write and edit documents, and prepare invoices. This job is a perfect fit for you because it allows you to utilize the skills you gained from your previous positions as a cashier and sales clerk. One of the key responsibilities of this job is organizing, and you have shown great proficiency in this area during your time at Little Tike Fashions. Your managers were impressed with your ability to maintain an organized clothing display area, and you can apply the same expertise to keeping the office documents in order. Additionally, your experience in taking inventory, ordering, and restocking clothing at Store-Mart will undoubtedly translate well to managing office supplies.

I understand that you had initially planned on applying for cashier and sales clerk positions, but I strongly believe this office assistant job is a better fit for you. Not only does it pay an average of $3.00 more per hour than those positions, it will also provide you with valuable job experience in the business field which could open doors to better opportunities in the future. However, the biggest advantage of this job is its work schedule – 9 to 5, Monday through Friday. This will give you the flexibility to pursue your dream of taking evening Business Administration classes. Imagine being able to work during the day and attend classes in the evenings, all while earning a steady income.

With all these benefits in mind, I highly encourage you to seize this opportunity and apply for the office assistant job at Tekware. It could be a stepping stone towards achieving your degree and a future career in the business world. To ensure you don't miss out, please drop off your resume and cover letter at our office before March 1st. I have no doubt that you'll excel in this role and prove to everyone, including yourself, just how capable and skilled you truly are.