I needed to write a good thesis statement for my english class about how people consume the news.
This is what i have tell me if its good, if not please help me revise
Back in the day people of a particular age would consume news by reading the newspaper, watching the news, or hearing the news by phone or by radio, now the internet has changed the game!
It's much too wordy. I doubt if it accurately tells what the paper is about.
http://writingcenter.unc.edu/resources/handouts-demos/writing-the-paper/thesis-statements
LOL - what particular age?
I am 74 and get a lot of my news on the internet, a little on the car radio, local news from local paper (but often the online edition), and TV only if it happens to be on at a restaurant where I am eating.
I used to get most of my news from the newspaper and radio. (TV and internet did not exist)
So I agree with your hypothesis.
Sorry I wasn't trying to be offensive.. I asked my grandparents and they told me ways they consumed the news back in the day and how drastically different it is now.. That's why i said that
I am not offended. You are doing just fine.
You should probably say "people of the age of my grandparents" (probably similar to my age).
maybe something like:
The internet and TV have largely replaced newspapers and radio as news sources for my grandparents.
Your thesis statement can be revised to be more concise and focused. Here's a revised version:
"The advent of the internet has revolutionized the way people consume news, replacing traditional methods such as print and broadcast with digital platforms that offer unprecedented access, interactivity, and customization."
This thesis statement highlights the main argument about the impact of the internet on news consumption. It mentions the shift from traditional methods to digital platforms and emphasizes the advantages of the internet, such as increased accessibility, interactivity, and customization. Remember to further develop your ideas and provide evidence in the body of your essay to support this thesis statement.