Writing sentences and paragraphs. Is the below correct?
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I am anxious study this field medical billing and coding that is the reason I am applying for this position. It will be a wonderful experience working in a clinic or hospital. The position would be a great opportunely in working with doctors, nurses and physicians for me. The one hospital that I would like to work at is UK. It’s a well know, caring and respected hospital. The experience that I have work for years with a company working with medical and dental claims has inspired me to pursue become a medical billing and coding operator it will be very exciting learning new diagnoses, new medications, new technologies, and new treatment. As for wanting to become a medical biller and coder would be learning more about the cause of heart and cancer as the reason it runs in the family. I have no problem working with people with heart and cancer conditions. With the Medical biller and coder I am learning new every day into medial world.
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I am anxious study this field medical billing and coding (NEW SENTENCE) that is the reason I am applying for this position. It will be a wonderful experience working in a clinic or hospital. The position would be a great opportunely (FOR ME) in working with doctors, nurses and physicians. The one hospital that I would like to work at is UK (SPELL OUT). It’s a well know, caring and respected hospital. The experience that (DELETE PREVIOUS PHRASE) I have work(ED) for years with a company working (DELETE PREVIOUS WORD) with medical and dental claims (NEW SENTENCE) has inspired me to pursue become a medical billing and coding operator (NEW SENTENCE) it will be very exciting learning (TO LEARN) new diagnoses, new medications, new technologies, and new treatment(S).
START NEW PARAGRAPH FOR CHANGE IN IDEAS, PLACES, PERSONS OR TIMES.
As for wanting to become a medical biller and coder would be learning more about the cause of heart and cancer as the reason it runs in the family. (DIVIDE PREVIOUS INTO TWO SENTENCES) I have no problem working with people with heart and cancer conditions. With (WORKING AS A? the Medical biller and coder I am learning new every day into medial world.
Paragraph 1
"I am anxious to study in the field of medical billing and coding, and that is the reason I am applying for this position. It would be a wonderful experience to work in a clinic or hospital, as it would give me the opportunity to work alongside doctors, nurses, and physicians. The one hospital that I would like to work at is UK, as it is a well-known, caring, and respected hospital. My years of experience working with a company that dealt with medical and dental claims has inspired me to pursue a career as a medical billing and coding operator. I find it very exciting to learn about new diagnoses, medications, technologies, and treatments. Furthermore, becoming a medical biller and coder would allow me to gain more knowledge about the causes of heart and cancer conditions, which run in my family. I have no problem working with people who have heart and cancer conditions. With each day, as a medical biller and coder, I am learning something new about the medical world."
To improve the clarity and coherence of this paragraph, there are a few adjustments that can be made:
Paragraph 1
"I am excited to pursue a career in medical billing and coding, which is why I am applying for this position. Working in a clinic or hospital would be a valuable experience, allowing me to collaborate with doctors, nurses, and physicians. Specifically, I am interested in working at UK, a renowned and compassionate hospital. My previous experience with a company that handled medical and dental claims has fueled my passion for becoming a medical billing and coding operator. I am enthusiastic about constantly learning new information regarding diagnoses, medications, technologies, and treatment methods. Additionally, I am eager to expand my knowledge of heart and cancer conditions, as they have a familial connection. I am prepared to work with individuals facing these conditions. Each day as a medical biller and coder, I find myself discovering new aspects of the medical field."