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There are on- going problems that need to be addressed at the DMD company. First there is uneven allocation of tasks. While Bonnie and Molly are working overtime at least twice a month, Jack and Rachel often have no work to do. This causes friction between the workers. There is always some kind of yelling going on between the workers. David Thomson and Victor Potack are not getting any help. Second, Melanie and Jessica share an administrative assistant who does most of their work for them. Third, Larry's assistant Molly can not get all her work done work done in the 15 hours that she works. Maybe you can talk to Larry assistant Molly and see if she is able to a total 3 days eight hour shifts in order to help out she would be able to help out Larry and Victor to whom she is also assigned to.
I do not think that the company is working as well as it can and would like to offer some suggestions.
Jack and Rachel could help Bonnie and Molly as well as helping out David Thomson who Rachel is assigened tomand is not helping at all. Not only would this help the productivity of the office but it will be a more peaceful place to work. To be successful the company needs teamwork without team work we have nothing. Jessica and Melanie should do more of their own work, freeing up their administrative assistant to help others. If Larry's assistant is unable to work more than 15 hours, perhaps she should be replaced by someone who can do so there are 125 employees in the company. Some of the employee's in the other office could be trained to help our group out when we are extremely busy and they are not. A full time administrative assistant could help Samuel and Frank Daly who have no assistant. Additional suggestions that I have rejected after much thought include hiring from Tina's Temp Agency, which is only a quick fix, and cutting back on employees' paid vacation time, which might cause them to not work as hard.

I have spent over 30 years working with the public including the 10 years I have been working with this company. In all this time I have never seen a company operate so poorly. The uneven productivity has had a negative impact on the company. The company will start to lose their clients. If the problem isn’t fixed soon the company will continue to make a bad name for it. This company has been is business for 50 years and we have several clients that have been using this company for at least 15 years. The employees' morale is getting quite low. This may cause some employees to quit which would not help
The DMD’s finances are slowly sinking. This has been going on for over a month, which is way to long. If you hire extra help that would improve the stress level that all lot of the employee’s feel. If the employees did not feel stressed they would do better at their jobs which would increase company morale. Thank you for allowing the time to talk to you regarding these important issues. If we all work together I believe that DMD will be here for another 50 years.


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  1. The first thing you need to find and fix are all run-ons. This happens whenever you don't have proper wording or punctuation to separate or join clauses. Mostly, it means you need to put periods at the ends of complete sentences!

    Read through these explanations and examples -- http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm -- and then read through your paper to find and fix all the run-ons. Then repost.


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