I posted this many times. I just want a list of comments about my essay not criticism (I don't think the things I wrote is wrong. This is what I got from articles. My essay is about the jobs he did and his literary influences. This is my topic of my essay.)
People stated my thesis needs revising; grammar errors needs fixing(haven't edited yet);
Ernest Hemingway
Ernest Hemingway was a great writer who influenced many writers through his stories and novels. His greatest goal was to become the best writer. His fictions were focused on his personal life experience. The stream of events in his life experience can be reflected on his writing. Hemingway once stated that "the writer's job is to tell the truth." He wanted his writing "to get the feeling of actual life across--not just to depict life or criticize it--but to actually make it alive." If he can make his characters true enough they would mean many things. Thanks to his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines he was able to find the truth in his writing. During his quest for truth he had many leading writers helped him enhance his ability as a writer. Ernest Hemingway gained experience writing through newspaper journalism and furthered his literary education through his many literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway developed his writing through working as a reporter and journalist in newspapers and magazines. He contributed in writing stories for the school newspaper, The Trapeze, and its literary magazine, Tabula. He contributed three stories during his junior year and during that time it revealed his early interest in violent death and suicide. Hemingway had written 24 articles for The Trapeze between November 1916 and May 1917. The quality of his work was not exceptional. Although the work he submitted wasn't all that great, but he gained experience that would help prepare him for his first job after graduating from high school. He took up the job as a cub reporter after high school with the Kansas City Star, one of the leading newspapers in America during that time period. He was given advice from first-rate journalistic professionals. Hemingway has to make his writing meet specific standard requirements with the Kansas City Star style sheet. The reporters have to avoid adjectives, use short sentences, brief paragraphs, vigorous English, and fresh phrases. This style of writing became the permanent influence in Hemingway's own style as a fiction writer. Hemingway covered the police station and the city hospital, and interviewed victims of accidents and violent crimes. By the end of April 1918, Hemingway left the Kansas City Star to join an American Red Cross ambulance unit in World War I. After his return from the war he worked very hard as a writer. He tried to follow a formula to sell his stories to any mass-market magazines such as The Saturday Evening Post. In the end the stories he submitted was in vain. His work was rejected because he couldn't find his own narrative voice or his own material. In January 1920, Hemingway left for Toronto and became a freelancer for the Toronto Star. After his marriage with Hadley Richardson he worked at Paris as a correspondent for the Toronto Star. He returned to Chicago in May and worked for the Co-operative Commonwealth, a monthly magazine. In November 1922, he was in Lausanne, Switzerland covering a peace conference on a territorial dispute between Greece and Turkey. Hemingway left Paris and returned to Toronto where he became a full-time reporter with the Toronto Star. After Christmas, Hemingway resigned his position as a reporter at Toronto Star. In February 1924, he returned to France where he worked as an unpaid assistant editor for transatlantic review, a journal founded by Ford Madox Ford that publish experimental fiction. Ford decided to go to New York to raise more money for the review. Ford wrote an announcement in the July issue that he is leaving the editorial duties to Hemingway while he is in New York. Upon Ford's return from New York he saw the contributor list for August issue. Ford thought that Hemingway had used the opportunity to publish his American friends' work while he was gone. Hemingway felt that his criticism was unfair because he had worked so hard for the review. In January 1925, the transatlantic review came to an end. His days as a journalist helped him gain the experience he needed to become a fiction writer. Journalism was only part of what made him a successful writer. He also had many leading writers at that period as his literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway had many writers as his literary influences that helped him become a better writer. These influences include, Sherwood Anderson, Ezra Pound, and Gertrude Stein. In Chicago Hemingway befriended with Sherwood Anderson, an author of Whinesburg Ohio. Anderson encouraged Hemingway's writing efforts and convinced Hemingway to go to Paris because it was the place for any serious writers. Anderson's letters of introduction played a vital role for Hemingway's literary development. Anderson supplied Hemingway with letters of introduction to: Gertrude Stein, leader of the American expatriates, Sylvia Beach, owner of the English-language bookstore Shakespeare and Company, James Joyce, writer who novel Beach was about to publish, and Ezra Pound, the influential poet. Anderson also mailed an introductory letter to Lewis Galantiere, one of his translators in France. Each of his letter praised Hemingway's extraordinary talent. Pound and Stein were important in his literary development. In February 1922, Hemingway met Ezra Pound, who was a major figure involved in the imagist movement during the period between 1909 and 1918. Pound became one of his most important literary friends. Pound was the one who helped get his early work published. Pound supervised Hemingway's literary education and recommended that he read works by T.S. Eliot and James Joyce. Pound encouraged him to delete unnecessary words and to give images meaning. Pound had submitted six of Hemingway's poems to the Dial, but the magazine editor rejected because Pound had also submitted T.S. Eliot's "The Waste Land." Pound also accepted one of his stories for the Little Review, but unfortunately the editors rejected the submission. Harriet Monroe, an editor of Chicago little magazine, Poetry: A Magazine of Verse accepted six of Hemingway's poems. Even though Pound's editorial influence on his work wasn't as great compare to Eliot's, but was responsible for promoting his reputation and helped shape his career. In March 1922, Hemingway met Gertrude Stein. Stein pointed out that his novel contained too much description, and not particularly good description. She also pointed out that the heartless seduction scene in "Up in Michigan" made the story not suitable to be publish. Stein told Hemingway to "Begin over again and concentrate." Hemingway observed Stein's style of writing. Her writing was full of repeated words, phrases consisted of preposition and its object, and present participles. He credited Stein for helping him understanding prose rhythms. Hemingway said that he had learned how to write as much from painters as from other writers. He had studied paintings by Henri Matisse, Georges Braque, Juan Gris, Pablo Piasco, and Paul Cézanne. These are the painters that he admire because of their ability to capture the landscape. Paul Cézanne is his most favorite painter out of all of his other admired painters. In the ending of "Big Two-Hearted River" Nick Adams says that he wants to write the way Cézanne painted. When Hemingway returned to France Pound introduced him to Ford Madox Ford at his studio and Ford hired him as his assistant editor for the transatlantic review. His literary influences helped develop his path as a writer.
Ernest Hemingway became a successful writer through experience he gained from newspaper journalism and furthered development from his many literary influences. Through his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines helped fulfilled his quest for truth. Hemingway observed and learned different style of writing through leading writers of the time he had met in Paris. He used the knowledge he had gained into his writing. Without the help his literary influences he wouldn't be the Ernest Hemingway whose stories and novels influenced generation of writers.
please and thank you
I"ll print this and try to do it in the morning. My eyes are too tired now to scan up and down.
Sra
thank you
First of all, I am not going back to find the other post where I spent so much time correcting. However, I find the SAME mistakes in this one. Did you totally ignore prior corrections? Your job was to correct every one of those errors when you reposted, OR I have totally wasted my time. Because I took time to correct the first one I saw, I now feel that I wasted my time. Trust me, I do NOT have time to waste. I will do what I can with this, but do NOT ask me to look at it again!
Secondly decide whether you are going to relate this information in the PRESENT or the PAST. A combination of the two tenses is bad. Your essay could use more commas, although the tendency today is to omit a lot of punctuation. Depending upon the level of English you are writing, a series of simple sentences would look like more sopisticaated writing, if you combined them into a complex sentence.
Your essay appears below copied as you wrote it. Read it carefully because I will correct with a papenthetical explanation afterward.
Ernest Hemingway was a great writer who influenced many writers through his stories and novels. His greatest goal was to become the best writer. His fictions were focused on his personal life experience. The stream of events in his life experience can be reflected IN (not on) his writing. Hemingway once stated that" (punctuation) "the writer's job is to tell the truth." He wanted his writing "to get the feeling of actual life across--not just to depict life or criticize it--but to actually make it alive." If he can make his characters true enough they would mean many things. Thanks to his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines he was able to find the truth in his writing. During his quest for truth he had many leading writers WHO (added or writers help his...) helped him enhance his ability as a writer. Ernest Hemingway gained experience writing through newspaper journalism and furthered his literary education through his many literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway developed his writing through working as a reporter and journalist in newspapers and magazines. He contributed in writing stories for the school newspaper, The Trapeze, and its literary magazine, Tabula. He contributed three stories during his junior year and during that time it revealed his early interest in violent death and suicide. Hemingway had written 24 articles for The Trapeze between November 1916 and May 1917. The quality of his work was not exceptional. Although the work he submitted wasn't all that great, (DELETE 'BUT") he gained experience that would help prepare him for his first job after graduating from high school. He took up the job as a cub reporter after high school with the Kansas City Star, one of the leading newspapers in America during that time period. He was given advice from first-rate journalistic professionals. Hemingway had (Past Tense) to make his writing meet specific standard requirements with the Kansas City Star style sheet. The reporters had (Past Tense) to avoid adjectives, use short sentences, brief paragraphs, vigorous English, and fresh phrases. This style of writing became the permanent influence in Hemingway's own style as a fiction writer. Hemingway covered the police station and the city hospital, and interviewed victims of accidents and violent crimes. By the end of April 1918, Hemingway left the Kansas City Star to join an American Red Cross ambulance unit in World War I. After his return from the war he worked very hard as a writer. He tried to follow a formula to sell his stories to any mass-market magazines such as The Saturday Evening Post. In the end the stories he submitted wERE (plural subject) in vain. His work was rejected because he couldn't find his own narrative voice or his own material. In January 1920, Hemingway left for Toronto and became a freelancer for the Toronto Star. After his marriage with Hadley Richardson he worked IN (at?) Paris as a correspondent for the Toronto Star. He returned to Chicago in May and worked for the Co-operative Commonwealth, a monthly magazine. In November 1922, he was in Lausanne, Switzerland covering a peace conference on a territorial dispute between Greece and Turkey. Hemingway left Paris and returned to Toronto where he became a full-time reporter with the Toronto Star. After Christmas, Hemingway resigned his position as a reporter at Toronto Star. In February 1924, he returned to France where he worked as an unpaid assistant editor for Yransatlantic Review, (IF IT IS THE NAME OF THE JOURNAL, YOU MUST CAPITALIZE IT) a journal founded by Ford Madox Ford that published (Past Tense) experimental fiction. Ford decided to go to New York to raise more money for the review. Ford wrote an announcement in the July issue that he was (Past Tense) leaving the editorial duties to Hemingway while he was (same thing) in New York. Upon Ford's return from New York he saw the contributor list for August issue. Ford thought that Hemingway had used the opportunity to publish his American friends' work while he was gone. Hemingway felt that his criticism was unfair because he had worked so hard for the review. In January 1925, the Transatlantic Review (capitalized) came to an end. His days as a journalist helped him gain the experience he needed to become a fiction writer. Journalism was only part of what made him a successful writer. He also had many leading writers at that period as his literary influences.
Ernest Hemingway had many writers as his literary influences that helped him become a better writer. These influences include, Sherwood Anderson, Ezra Pound, and Gertrude Stein. In Chicago Hemingway befriended (delete "with") Sherwood Anderson, an author of Whinesburg Ohio. Anderson encouraged Hemingway's writing efforts and convinced Hemingway to go to Paris because it was the place for any serious writers. Anderson's letters of introduction played a vital role for Hemingway's literary development. Anderson supplied Hemingway with letters of introduction to: Gertrude Stein, leader of the American expatriates, Sylvia Beach, owner of the English-language bookstore Shakespeare and Company, James Joyce, writer whose (not who but wose) novel Beach was about to publish, and Ezra Pound, the influential poet. Anderson also mailed an introductory letter to Lewis Galantiere, one of his translators in France. Each of his letters (must be plural) praised Hemingway's extraordinary talent. Pound and Stein were important in his literary development. In February 1922, Hemingway met Ezra Pound, who was a major figure involved in the imagist movement during the period between 1909 and 1918. Pound became one of his most important literary friends. Pound was the one who helped get his early work published. Pound supervised Hemingway's literary education and recommended that he read works by T.S. Eliot and James Joyce. Pound encouraged him to delete unnecessary words and to give images meaning. Pound had submitted six of Hemingway's poems to the Dial, but the magazine editor rejected them (OR which the magazine editor rejected) because Pound had also submitted T.S. Eliot's "The Waste Land." Pound also accepted one of his stories for the Little Review, but unfortunately the editors rejected the submission. Harriet Monroe, an editor of (a) Chicago little magazine, Poetry: A Magazine of Verse, (comma as people accepted, not the magazine itself!) accepted six of Hemingway's poems. Even though Pound's editorial influence on his work wasn't as great compared(add "d") to Eliot's, it (delete "but" and add"it") was responsible for promoting his reputation and helped shape his career. In March 1922, Hemingway met Gertrude Stein. Stein pointed out that his novel contained too much description, and not particularly good description. She also pointed out that the heartless seduction scene in "Up in Michigan" made the story not suitable to be published (add "ed"). Stein told Hemingway to "Begin over again and concentrate." Hemingway observed Stein's style of writing. Her writing was full of repeated words, phrases that (or which) consisted of a (add "a") preposition and its object, and present participles. He credited Stein for helping him understand ("to understand" is understood) prose rhythms. Hemingway said that he had learned how to write as much from painters as from other writers. He had studied paintings by Henri Matisse, Georges Braque, Juan Gris, Pablo Piasco, and Paul Cézanne. These are the painters that he admired (Past Tense) because of their ability to capture the landscape. Paul Cézanne was(still Past) his most favorite painter out of all of his other admired painters. In the ending of "Big Two-Hearted River" Nick Adams says that he wanted (past) to write the way Cézanne painted. When Hemingway returned to France Pound introduced him to Ford Madox Ford at his studio and Ford hired him as his assistant editor for the Transatlantic Review.(capitalized) His literary influences helped develop his path as a writer.
Ernest Hemingway became a successful writer through experience he gained from newspaper journalism and furthered development from his many literary influences. Through his many careers as a writer for newspapers and magazines helped fulfilled his quest for truth. Hemingway observed and learned different style of writing through leading writers of the time he had met in Paris. He used the knowledge he had gained int (in vs into) his writing. Without the help of (of or from) his literary influences he wouldn't be the Ernest Hemingway whose stories and novels influenced generation of writers.
Now, make ALL the corrections BEFORE you repost this again. Also, a repeat "do you have each separate idea in a separate paragraph?
Sra
Based on your request, you are looking for a list of comments about your essay rather than criticism. However, it seems that you have mentioned some concerns about your thesis and grammar errors that still need fixing.
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